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Hello Clozi, welcome on board! Tu trouveras ton texte corrigé et annoté ci-dessous. Hello Good morning/afternoon Sir, < Jamais « Hello», c'est trop familier. Formulation à choisir en fonction du moment. Today, I stand before you to express my wishes. Indeed, I intend to study abroad in the city of Montreal located in the province of Quebec. I desire want/hope/wish to join the prestigious McGill University for the beginning of the academic year 2023. You must be wondering why I chose to study abroad instead of staying in a place I'm familiar with. To begin with, I come from a rather poor family, my determination and ambitions are linked by with the fact that I don't want to experience/live in destitution anymore. Also the fact that I having studied abroad is will be a real plus in the resume ;<C’est encore du non-accompli, donc le futur recruiters like to hire students who have studied abroad because it says a lot about their characters/personalities.< Plusieurs possesseurs = compléments communs au pluriel It would allow me to create a real address and contact book. Generally speaking, studying in a English-speaking country allows you to make friends who come from all over the world, so you can improve your langage skills and even become bilingual. I'll be able to discover many cultures through the country where I live and through my classmates. Finally, going to Quebec means a complete change of scenery as well as a breath of fresh air. The landscapes are very beautiful and colorful in autumn, it is a rather green city which changes from the grayness of Paris. Nevertheless, studying abroad doesn't only means <aïe, aïe, aïe, ne prononce surtout pas ce -s parasite ! social benefit but also personal benefit. It would allow me to become more independent, more open-minded, more mature and more autonomous. Moreover, it would allow me to learn things I didn't know about myself. All of these benefits would allow me to develop self-confidence because I would acquire and develop things skills I didn't expect or I was’nt able to develop or acquire before. However this project could never be realized <C’est encore irréalisé as it involves a certain financial cost, this is why, sir, I'm asking for your help and your benevolance so that this project can come to fruition. <Sans vouloir t’offenser, je n’aime pas cette phrase. Si elle te paraît recherchée, moi je la trouve pompeuse. Je te propose une autre formulation en dessous. Although I have my heart set on studying in Quebec, I know I won’t be financially able to carry out this project unless I receive a grant. Please Sir, help me make my dream come true! Thank you for your attention and your consideration. <Autre formulation en dessous itou. Thank you so much in advance for your benevolent attention. Tous mes voeux pour ton oral, tiens-moi au courant.