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[Fiona766]

Bonjour à tous,

voici une conclusion sur les enfants de la guerre à Sarajevo en 1993,  pourriez-vous corriger les fautes, s'il vous plaît? bonne journée. Hononryne

*As a conclusion, going to see this exhibition gave me another look of the modern world. I didn’t think there are still some young children who suffered as much of the war : contrary to the world war, there are now means of communication and information that allow us to know what is going on and intervene if necessary. Futhermore humanitarian assistance like ONU, UNICEF, were created after world war to protect population and particularly childrens.

 

*Reza understood that these agencies wasn’t enought and it was required to go out and meet them. He shows us their reality but also inspires hope in them by inspiration from his personal experience. Thus, Reza has set up a project with young Afghans : he offered them cameras, trained them in the first photographic techniques and allowed them to express themselves freely. Indeed one of his students particularly upset him by simply shooting his frozen shoes in the early morning…a very simple picture but very representativeof daily lige in the refuge camps.

[Jean B]

Bonjour Honoryne,

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Quand tu rédiges en anglais, oublie de penser en français ! C'est incompatible.

[Fiona766]

Merci beaucoup!

Oui je pense toujours en français, c'est très difficile de ne plus penser en français.

Bonne journée. Honoryne.