Myths and Heroes

[Fiona766]

Bonjour Monsieur, je m'appelle Alaina et suis amie de Stan, Fiona. Fiona me conseille déposer mes devoirs à corriger sur ce site. Voilà je viens de terminer ma 1ère notion: Pouvez-vous la corriger? Merci beaucoup et bonne année à tous les membres de ce site. Voici le texte:

So i'm going to talk about the notion of « myths and heroes ».

A Hero can be defined as a person who is admired and recognized (=reconnue) for his achievments, (actes, accomplissements), qualities and her courage.

He is often fictional but in this notion, the heroes i'm going to talk about are only humans and give us concrete examples of acts.

After studying many examples of heroes, we can now say that they are people who contributed to making other people's lives better.

 

To deal with this notion, I have chosen to answer question : « How can a human being becom a heroe by helping a socity ? »

 

for example we've seen that the African socity had been shaped after a long period of civil wars. To explain this idee, let me present you a text of Bono's story. If I hade chosen it, it's because I think that it clearly represents the fact that a struggle is sometimes necessary.

Bono is the leader singer of U2. He's very popular because he founded in 2002 DATA. DATA means Debt, AIDS, Trade, Africa. DATA's mission is not about charity, but about equality and justice. DATA calls the gouvernments of the world's wealthy nations (The USA, Europe, Canada, Japan) to put more ressources into Africa and adopte policy that helps Africa. Bono is an activist, his generosity and his effort to help poor have made him a modern day heroe.

 

Moreover, Bono loved Bon Merley. To him he not only felt his music but understood it.

 

Bob marley found his escape from the violence in the ghetto in music. He had a musical still, he had a mindset (état d'esprit) to make a change in Jamaica and the world.

He has done more for Jamaica through his music than most politicians have done to temper violence. His birthday (th 6^th of february) was declared a national holiday in Jamaica and ha was awarded the order of merit in 1981, which is a high honor.

He sang about rights for Africans, because these was a cultural rebellion in 1970. Requesting the tow opposing political to shake hands in 1976 was an event that really shows that Marley's commitment (engagement) to making a change in Jamaica.

Heroes cannot just sing or play they have to be able (être capable) to practice what they preach ( pensée profonde).

 

To sum up the myth & hero gives a good image of a country. A Hero restores hope and motivation to fight even when it is difficult.

To conclude I think myths & heroes are important for our socity because they give hope. They act as an example for people we need some heroes like Bono and Bob Marley to fight inequality in the world

[Jean B]

Bonjour, Alaina et bienvenue sur e-bahut.

Merci pour tes voeux et bonne année pleine de réussite à toi et les tiens.

So I'm going to talk about the notion of « myths and heroes ».

A hero can be defined as a person who is admired and recognized for his their achievements,  qualities and her courage. <Une personne héroïque pouvant être une héroïne aussi bien qu'un héro, l'emploi de l'adjectif possessif pluriel s'impose qui s'applique indifféremment aux deux sexes.

He A hero is often fictional but in this notion, the heroes I'm going to talk about are only humans and give us concrete examples of their deeds/acts.

After studying many examples of heroes, we can now say that they are people who contributed to making other people's lives better.

To deal with this notion, I have chosen to answer the question : « How can a human being become a heroe by helping a society? »

For example, we've seen that the African society had been shaped after a long period of civil wars. To explain this idea, let me present a text of Bono's story to you. If I have chosen it, it's because I think that it clearly represents the fact that a struggle is sometimes necessary.

Bono is the leader singer of U2. He's very popular because he founded DATA in 2002 . DATA means Debt, AIDS, Trade, Africa. DATA's mission is not about charity but about equality and justice. DATA calls the governments of the world's wealthy nations (The USA, Europe, Canada, Japan) to put more ressources into Africa and adopt a policy that helps Africa. Bono is an activist, his generosity and his effort to help poor have made him a modern day heroe.

Moreover, Bono loved Bon Merley Bob Marley. < Je suppose !  To him he not only felt his music but understood it.

Bob Marley found his escape from the violence in the ghetto in music. He had a musical still < ??? style, he had a mindset to make a change in Jamaica and the world.

He has done more for Jamaica through his music than most politicians have done to temper violence. His birthday (6^th of February) was declared a national holiday in Jamaica and he was awarded the order of merit in 1981, which is a high honor.

He sang about rights for Africans because these there was a cultural rebellion in 1970. Requesting the two opposing political leaders to shake hands in 1976 was an event that really shows that Marley's commitment to making a change in Jamaica.

Heroes cannot just sing or play; they have to be able to practice what they preach.

 

To sum up the hero myth gives a good image of a country. A hero restores hope and motivation to fight even when it is difficult.

To conclude I think myths & heroes are important for our socity because they give hope. They act as an example for people.  We need some heroes like Bono and Bob Marley to fight inequality in the world.

- Le pronom sujet de la première personne du singulier ne s'écrit qu'avec le I MAJUSCULE, même si ça ne se voit pas à l'oral.

- Prends l'habitude de te relire toujours, ne serait-ce que pour corriger toi-même les fautes de frappe, d'orthographe ou autres omissions. Pense que personne ne le fera à ta place un jour d'examen ou de concours.

- Enfin, inutile de mettre du français entre parenthèses, je comprends parfaitement l'anglais !

Bonne continuation.

[Fiona766]

Bonsoir Monsieur,

 

Je vous remercie pour vos conseils et pour la correction apportée.

Bonne soirée,

Alaina.