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cut the activity of all the power plants was immediate.

Yesterday morning, as every year occurred the control of quite nuclear power plant of France. Indeed on January 3rd, 2017, one of the bosses of the power plant of Fessenheim noticed bad maintenance of this one. So, he called up urgently to the Elysee to prevent them of the situation. Some hour later all other power plants noticed the same problem as that of Fessenheim. Some rust installed settled on walls risk of create explosions in the next months. The cut of power plants arose at exactly noon. So, cuts regular of in an overconsumption occurs almost every hour. Today, the public transportation is cut, internet, all the computer system is interrupted as well as all the modes of heating when houses and in companies. The panic of the population begins has to make it feel because without the electricity we can make nothing more neither worked nor we warmed, nor we moved. It will be necessary more of 6 month to restore this dramatic problem. Companies and hospitals are closed and say that they are going all to go bankrupt if this cut continues. The state asked as a matter of urgency for helps of countries neighbor but without answer at the moment. Finally, we advise you of installed urgently panel’s solar energy or wind turbine to resolve the situation in your houses because in some month the price the electricity is going to climb.

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[be.british29]

Here you go, I've underlined what needed changing. Hope this will do the job ☺

 

 

cut the activity of all the power plants was immediate.

Yesterday morning, like every year, occurred the control of France’s nuclear power plant. However, on January 3rd, 2017, one of the bosses of the power plant of Fessenheim noticed bad maintenance of this one. So, he called urgently the Elysee to let them know about the situation.

A few hours later, all the other power plants had noticed the same problem as the one that had been detected at Fessenheim. Some rust settled on walls, which could create explosions in the next months. Consequently, they cut off all the power plants this noon. Regular cuts occurred almost every hour, because of an overconsumption.

Today, the public transportation is cut; internet has stopped, all the computer systems are interrupted as well as all the modes of heating houses and companies. What had to follow, followed, the population is starting to get panicked because without electricity nothing more can be made. It makes it impossible for the population to either work or move, or even get warm.

More than six months will be necessary to restore this dramatic problem. Companies and hospitals are therefore closed and exclaim that they are all going to get bankrupt if this cut continues. The state asked as a matter of urgency for help from neighbour countries, but this demand stays without answer for the moment.

We are, for this reason, advising you all to urgently install panels solar energy or winds turbine in your houses to help you get throw this situation and for the inevitable climb of price of electricity that will no doubt arrive in a couple of months.

[Jean B]

Il y a 23 heures, be.british29 a dit :

Here you go, I've underlined what needed changing. Hope this will do the job ☺

Hello,

I'm afraid that won't quite do the job because the text was probably written in French first, then Google translated. Thanks for your help anyway.

 

[be.british29]

Ah! That's probably why the original text was really badly written! Should've realized that before correcting it... Never mind