exposé oral sur les problèmes d'eau au Bangladesh

[Babamari]

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Today we are going to talk about Dhaka the capital of Bangladesh. On Dhaka, 80% of the population hasn't access to the drinking water. The City needs 2,2 billions of littres of water but her to supply with it only 1,9 in 2 billions. The most affected are the ones who live un suburs. These zones makes local happiness of the mafias which appropriated the sale of waters at prices to deceiver. In Dhaka, the problem of water results mainly from à dependence subterranean waters. But this water have arsenic. A study demonstrates that half of the Bangladesh population consumes a water the concentration of which un arsenic is superior un normal.

But the population doesn't realize that the water is contamined and that it's dangerous for their health. The arsenic causes cancers, diabetes and cardiovascular diseases. 

Nevertheless formely Dhaka had à source of drinking water grace has its River Buriganga. But actually she is very to pollute and thus undrinkable because of the various waste of the population. Nevertheless people use the water of the river and fall ill faster thab somewere else.

 

Merci d'avance 

[yveslouis]

Le 23/04/2016 at 13:00, Babamari a dit :

Bonjour pourriez vous corriger mon texte svp ?

Today we are going to talk about Dhaka the capital of Bangladesh. On Dhaka, 80% of the population hasn't access to the drinking water. The City needs 2,2 billions of littres of water but her to supply (???) with it only 1,9 in 2 billions. The most affected are the ones who live un suburs. These zones makes local happiness of the mafias which appropriated the sale of waters at prices to deceiver. In Dhaka, the problem of water results mainly from à dependence (préposition ?) subterranean waters. But this water have arsenic. A study demonstrates that half of the Bangladesh population consumes a water the concentration of which un arsenic is superior un normal.

But the population doesn't realize that the water is contamined and that it's (évite les contractions dans un texte écrit !) dangerous for their health. The arsenic causes cancers, diabetes and cardiovascular diseases. 

Nevertheless formely Dhaka had à source of drinking water grace has (Manifestement traduit par un ordinateur ! Évite au moins les fautes d'orthographe en français si tu veux que ça se voit moins !)  its River Buriganga. But actually (Veux-tu dire "actuellement" ? "Actually" est un faux-ami. Regarde dans le dictionnaire.) she is very to pollute (Tu as dû écrire "polluer" dans ton texte en français. Je me trompe ?) and thus undrinkable because of the various waste of the population. Nevertheless people use the water of the river and fall ill faster thab somewere anywhere else.

 

Merci d'avance