Aide Gaz De Schiste (Forme Passive)

[macx]

Bonjour,

 

Je devais rendre un sujet controversé de 250-300 mots en anglais mais j'ai reçu le résultat et c'est pas terrible, la plupart des fautes se situe au niveaux des verbes car j'ai voulu mettre à la forme passive. On nous as proposé d'en refaire un et cette fois ci je veux savoir ce qu'il vaut et le corriger avant de le rendre. 

 

Le voici :

 

Shale gas in France

 

It is currently forbidden in France. The shale gas is a natural gas contained in a permeable rock. To extract this gas, it is necessary to use an expensive combination of technology of deep drilling and hydraulic fracturing.

 

 

First, shale gas is an important estimated resource in France. It began to be heavily exploited in 2000 for economic reasons with the increase of natural gas price and technology progress that improved efficiency and profit. And this permitted the economic development of some regions.

 

Furthermore, the moral issue is significant because generally, developed countries polluted and used resources of developing countries resources. Thus it was more ethical than they used their richness with the disadvantages this entails.

 

Nevertheless, the extraction in France sparks emotion due to environmental issue. Indeed, this technique allowed to fracture the rock with an injection of a mixture of water and solvent. And leaks of gas were observed, these leaks came up from surface and air became harmful.

 

Moreover, it was need an enormous consumption of water. In United State of America, many cases like dead cows for farmer because lac water was polluted by gas leak. The infiltration into groundwater was a health problem because people has got gas to their tab and it is very dangerous.

 

Finally, a new technical of extraction, the exothermic extraction was cleaner than hydraulic fracturing. This technic used helium liquid to be transform, with earth heat, in gas and fracture rock without solvent.

 

 

To conclude, it is an industrial activity with a benefic process for economy but main constraint is ecological and very alarming but if several process more environmentally friendly was found, interest for shale gas wasn’t excluded.

[yveslouis]

Bonjour,

 

Je devais rendre un sujet controversé de 250-300 mots en anglais mais j'ai reçu le résultat et c'est pas terrible, la plupart des fautes se situe au niveaux des verbes car j'ai voulu mettre à la forme passive. On nous as proposé d'en refaire un et cette fois-ci je veux savoir ce qu'il vaut et le corriger avant de le rendre. 

 

Le voici :

 

Shale gas in France

 

It (what is "it"?) is currently forbidden in France. The shale gas is a natural gas contained in a permeable rock. To extract this gas, it is necessary to use an expensive combination of technology of deep drilling and hydraulic fracturing.

 

 

First, (Tu n'as pas annoncé de démonstration d'aucune sorte. Pourquoi "First" ?) shale gas is an important estimated resource in France. It began to be heavily exploited (in France?) in 2000 for economic reasons with the increase of natural gas price and technology progress that improved efficiency and profit. And this permitted the economic development of some regions.

 

Furthermore, the moral issue is significant because generally, developed countries polluted and used resources of developing countries resources (Revois la construction !). Thus it was more ethical than they used their richness with the disadvantages this entails.

 

Nevertheless, the extraction in France sparks emotion due to environmental issue. Indeed, this technique allowed to fracture the rock with an injection of a mixture of water and solvent. And leaks of gas were observed, these leaks came up from the surface and the air became harmful.

 

Moreover, it was need an enormous consumption of water (emploie donc le passif, ici !). In the United States of America, many cases like dead cows for farmer because lac water was polluted by gas leaks. The infiltration into groundwater was a health problem because people has got gas to their tabs and it ,which is very dangerous.

 

Finally, a new technical of extraction, the exothermic extraction was (pourquoi un preterit ? Ce n'est plus le cas ?) cleaner than hydraulic fracturing. This technic used (pourquoi un preterit ? Ce n'est plus le cas ?)  helium liquid (construction) to be which is transformed, with earth heat, into gas and fractures the rock without solvent.

 

 

To conclude, it is an industrial activity with a benefic process for economy but main constraint is ecological and very alarming but (but...and...but... sais-tu ce que tu veux dire ? if several processes more environmentally friendly (place de l'adjectif ?) was ("several" est pluriel, "was" est singulier...) found, interest for shale gas wasn’t (un conditionnel serait mieux vu, ici) excluded.

 

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[macx]

Tout d’abord, merci de m'avoir répondu. J'ai tenté une correction des fautes et voici ce que j'obtient :

 

Shale gas is currently forbidden in France. It is a natural gas contained in a permeable rock. To extract this gas, it is necessary to use an expensive combination of technology of deep drilling and hydraulic fracturing.

 

 

First, shale gas is an important estimated resource in France. It began to be heavily exploited (in France? Non en général donc je n'ai pas fait de précision) in 2000 for economic reasons with the increase of natural gas price and technology progress that improved efficiency and profit. And this permitted the economic development of some regions.

 

Furthermore, the moral issue is significant because generally, developed countries polluted and used resources of developing countries. Thus it was more ethical they had used their richness with the disadvantages this entails.

 

Nevertheless, the extraction in France sparks emotion due to environmental issue. Indeed, this technique allowed to fracture the rock with an injection of a mixture of water and solvent. And leaks of gas were observed, these leaks came up to the surface and the air became harmful.

 

Moreover, it is needed an enormous consumption of water. In the United States of America, many cases like dead cows to farmer because lac are polluted by gas leaks. Theinfiltration into groundwater was a health problem because people got gas to their tabs which is very dangerous.

 

Finally, a new technique of extraction, the exothermic extraction is cleaner than hydraulic fracturing. This skill use liquid helium which is transformed, with earth heat, into gas and fractures the rock without solvent.

 

 

To conclude, it is an industrial activity with a benefic process for economy and it is very alarming to ecology but (but...and...but... sais-tu ce que tu veux dire ? if several processes more eco-aware were found, interest for shale gas would be excluded.