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[Fiona766]

Bonjour: le sujet une question: Can Immigration be an asset for a country?

Je n'étais pas très inspiré et n'y ai pas beaucoup passé de temps en raison d'autre travaux à effectuer. Il manque, par exemple, un exemple concret pour le paragraphe concernant le rejet des immigrés dans certains pays. De plus,avec le peu que j'ai fait, j'ai dépassé de 73 mots, le quota imposé par le professeur...or, il a fortement insisté sur sa volonté d'une production d'un stricte maximum de 300 mots. Merci de votre correction. Stan.

Firstly, we have to define what exactly immigration is: the action of an individual to be set up in a country and coming from a different country than this one.

The question of immigration is rarely a subject which make all people agree and the conception of this idea really depends of the country you are and of the person you have in front of you. Someone will say that immigration in our country is bad, and some other will tell you about the good aspects.

Its why, we are going to study the different aspects of immigration, firstly the good one, and then the bad one, at different periods and on different country.

To begin, I would say that immigration is before all an asset for the diversity of a country. Indeed, with the arrival of a new population from all around the world, a country will be enriched by the possession of many cultures, many ways of life and they will permit a country to become a multicultural country. Its that we have seen in the USA, during all the 20th century with a huge number of immigrants welcomed, and, nowadays, this country benefit of a really diverse society.

Moreover, immigration is an asset for a country from an economics point of view. In fact, with the arrival of a new population, some activity sectors will be developed by the contribution of labour and of various know-how. For example, Germany is, presently, welcoming lots of Spanish people (who dont have work because of the unemployment in Spain) to contribute to develop the workforce of its factories and so, the competition of its economy.

After explained what could be the assets about immigration for a country, we can know study its disadvantages.

First of all, it seems obvious, that the immigrants are often rejected by the hosting population. Sometimes they dont tolerate the differences with the incoming population and it causes, sometimes, many conflicts.

In addition, we can also say that immigration is bad for a country when its illegal immigration. For example; we have recently seen in Malta that, the troubles caused by illegal immigration led to a more repressive politics about immigration, so that the Human rights are not respected.

[Jean B]

Bonjour, Stan.

Firstly, we have to define what immigration is exactly: the action of an individual to be set up settle in a country and coming from a different country than this from his native one.< ainsi c'est un peu plus clair et plus bref

The question of immigration is rarely a subject which make all people everybody agrees about and the conception of this idea really depends of on the country you are and of the person you have in front of you. Someone will say that immigration in our country is bad, and some other will tell you about the good aspects.

Its That's why we are going to study the different aspects of immigration, firstly the good ones, and then the bad ones, at different periods and on different in various countries.

To begin, I would say that immigration is before all an asset for the diversity of a country. Indeed, with the arrival of a new population from all around the world, a country will be enriched by the possession of many cultures, many ways of life and they that will permit enable a country to become a multicultural country one. Its that we have seen < Tu es trop jeune pour en avoir été vraiment témoin That is what happened in the USA during all the 20th century with a huge number of welcome immigrants and nowadays this country benefit of enjoys a really diverse society.

Moreover immigration is an asset for a country from an economy point of view. In fact, with the arrival of a new population, some activity sectors will be developed by the contribution of labour and of various know-how. For example, Germany is presently welcoming lots of Spanish people (who dont have work because of the unemployment are unemployed in Spain) to contribute to develop the workforce of its factories and so the competition of its economy.

After explained explaining what could be the assets about immigration could be for to a country,<Vu que tu l'as déjà dit en introduction, est-ce bien utile de le rappeler ici ? Cela te ferait économiser 12 mots de plus we can know study its disadvantages.

First of all it seems obvious that the immigrants are often rejected by the hosting population. Sometimes they don't tolerate the differences with the incoming population and it often causes sometimes, many conflicts.

In addition we can also say that immigration is bad for a country when it's illegal immigration. For example we have recently seen in Malta that the troubles caused by illegal immigration led to a more repressive politics policy about immigration, so that the Human rights are not respected.

Tu uses et abuses des virgules, j'en ai supprimé des tas !

Sois plus prévoyant pour demander de l'aide, organise mieux ton emploi du temps car tu n'es jamais sûr de recevoir une réponse en temps utile ni même de recevoir aucune réponse du tout.

Bonne chance.

[Fiona766]

bonjour Monsieur,

Je vous remercie beaucoup. J'ai énormément de mal à gérer le temps pour mes devoirs tant tous les professeurs nous sollicitent pour le bac. Je me sens stressé et effectivement tout est fait rapidement et donc peu brillant.

J'espère vous soumettre le prochain avec moins de virgules et surtout moins de fautes! j'ai un peu honte pour tout vous dire. bonne journée Monsieur. Stan.