Glee.

[Agatha]

Bonjour, à tous. J'ai pour les vacances un devoir en anglais à rendre, pour celà je devais regarder un film ou une série en anglais,

et faire une rédaction à partir de là, et résumer ce que j'ai regardé, J'ai choisis une série que j'aime bien : Glee. Voilà donc mon travail,

j'aimerai si possible que vous me dites ce qui ne va pas dans ce que j'ai essayé de faire, en vous remerciant d'avance.

During this Holiday, I watched a (episode of a famous serie tired of the season 3 ? ) called GLEE.

The scene take place in a colege, more pricisly in a chor.

The story talk about problems of the teens in the club «　The new directions　» and his teacher William Schuester.

The episode «　The purple piano project » start, for the new year at school. when a journalist ask Kurt, Mercedes, Santana and the other about their futur.

They prepare the biggest contest of chor with their teacher.

Previously, they lost the last contest (last episode of the season 2) because at the end of the show on stage,

Finn Hudson and Rachel Berry are kissed, that why, the other are desappointed because they thank only in them.

That why, some persons left the club.

Like Quinn a popular and beautiful girl change her lifestyle, she begin to smoke, wears dark clothes and leave the Glee club.

The glee club recieved presents from Al Motta some purple pianos so, The teacher decide this : «　Pianos will be placed in the colege, when you’ll see a piano you must play and sing to do add for the Glee club and recruit new people.　»

But in all stories there is a bad, and here her name is : Sue Sylverster, the headteacher to the shearleeders. She wants destroy the club, and for that, she decides to broke the pianos for people who don’t like this and vote for her in her new career of politician. Sue decides that if she wins the polls, she’ll delete art in the colege, what produces the fury of Will. To start Santana (who also plays in the chor) and Becky must destroy the pianos.

At the break, the club with the aid of Rachel begin to sing in the canteen, but everyone hates it, and Becky trown her drink on Rachel that provoke a «　food fight　»

Sugar Motta, the daugher of Al Motta who gave the pianos comes to her meet, and wants to join the club because she says «　when a saw you in the cafeteria, I thank that i’m better than you　» but when she begin to sing… it become a really desaster

Blaine the boyfriend of Kurt comes to The new Directions, and sing in front of the studies, and the Sherleeders dance to him, Santana and her friend put gasoline when there are dancing around the piano, and Quinn with her cigarette, put the fire to the piano.But Will discover that and sends back Santana.

Rachel and Kurt decide to go to New York to studie together at the AADNY. So they go to spend a Casting, but at the end, they are disappointed, because the level is very High .

The episode is finished, when together they sing a song.

To my opinion, I watch Glee since the start, it's a very funny serie because, the actors are young, the story talk about problems of our days.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Devant l'ampleur des dégâts, je me suis volontairement limité à quelques corrections en caractères gras.

Réfléchis pour comprendre les divers types d'erreurs que je t'ai balisées en rouge et les corriger toi-même.

Cette réflexion te sera sûrement plus profitable que si je t'avais donné toutes les corrections " clés en main ".

Bonjour à tous.

J'ai pour les vacances un devoir en anglais à rendre. Pour celà je devais regarder un film ou une série en anglais et faire une rédaction à partir de là et résumer ce que j'ai regardé. J'ai choisis une série que j'aime bien : Glee. Voilà donc mon travail,

j'aimerais si possible que vous me dites disiez ce qui ne va pas dans ce que j'ai essayé de faire, en vous remerciant d'avance.

During this Holiday, I watched a episode of a famous series tired of the season 3 ? called GLEE.

The scene take place in a colege, more pricisly in a choir.

The story talk about deals with problems of the teens in the club «　The new directions　» and his teacher William Schuester.

The episode «　The purple piano project » start, for the new year at school. when a journalist ask Kurt, Mercedes, Santana and the other about their future.

They prepare the biggest contest of choir with their teacher.

Previously, they lost the last contest (last episode of the season 2) because at the end of the show on stage,

Finn Hudson and Rachel Berry are kissed, that is why the others are disappointed because they thank only in them.

That is why, some persons left the club.

Like Quinn a popular and beautiful girl change her lifestyle, she begin to smoke, wears dark clothes and leave the Glee club.

The glee club received presents from Al Motta some purple pianos so, The teacher decide this : «　Pianos will be placed in the colege, when you’ll see a piano you must play and sing to do add for give the Glee club some publicity and recruit new members / people.　»

But in all stories there is a bad one, and here her name is Sue Sylverster, the headteacher to the shearleeders. She wants to destroy the club, and for that, she decides to broke the pianos for people who don’t like this and vote for her in her new career of politician. <Quelle phrase ! Sue decides that if she wins the polls, she’ll delete art in the colege, what which produces the fury of Will. To start Santana (who also plays in the choir) and Becky must destroy the pianos.

At the break, the club with the aid of Rachel begin to sing in the canteen, but everyone hates it, and Becky trown her drink on Rachel that provoke a «　food fight　»

Sugar Motta, the daugher of Al Motta who gave the pianos comes to her meet, and wants to join the club because she says «　when a saw you in the cafeteria, I thank that i’m better than you　» but when she begin to sing… it become a really disaster

Blaine the boyfriend of Kurt comes to The new Directions, and sing in front of the studies, and the Sherleeders dance to him, Santana and her friend put gasoline when there are dancing around the piano, and Quinn with her cigarette, put the fire to the piano.But Will discover that and sends back Santana.

Rachel and Kurt decide to go to New York to studie together at the AADNY. So they go to spend a Casting, but at the end, they are disappointed, because the level is very High .

The episode is finished, when together they sing a song.

To my opinion, I watch Glee since the start, it's a very funny series because the actors are young, the story talk about problems of our days.

[Agatha]

Beh'... C'est vraiment gentil, mais je ne comprends pas trop ce que vous avez écrit en rouge, c'est donc ce qui ne va pas ? Je dois remplacer mais seulement je sais pas vraiment avec quoi,

Et pour le plan, j'ai fait un peu a ma façon, parce que connais la série, mais en tant que lecteur, je comprends que ça soit un peu compliqué ^^ Je sais pas comment procéder pour les differentes étapes, si vous pouviez juste me donner quelques conseils sur la méthode ça serait plutôt sympa

Désolée pour les fautes, je l'avoue j'ai fait des fautes pitoyables =/ Je m'en excuse

[Jean B]

Beh'... C'est vraiment gentil, mais je ne comprends pas trop ce que vous avez écrit en rouge, c'est donc ce qui ne va pas ? Je dois remplacer mais seulement je sais pas vraiment avec quoi,

[Agatha]

Beh'... C'est vraiment gentil, mais je ne comprends pas trop ce que vous avez écrit en rouge, c'est donc ce qui ne va pas ? Je dois remplacer mais seulement je sais pas vraiment avec quoi,

[Jean B]

Si tu veux parler des mots de liaison, alors oui je confirme qu'ils sont très utiles dans le déroulement.

Tu en trouveras une liste (non exhaustive) ici.

[Agatha]

D'accord, merci beaucoup

[EotH]

J'aimerais juste pointer une erreur qui a echappé à JRB, si c'en est bien une: shearleader je connais pas, cheerleader?

[Boltzmann_Solver]

J'aimerais juste pointer une erreur qui a echappé à JRB, si c'en est bien une: shearleader je connais pas, cheerleader?

[Jean B]

J'aimerais juste pointer une erreur qui a echappé à JRB, si c'en est bien une: shearleader je connais pas, cheerleader ?

[Boltzmann_Solver]

J'aimerais juste pointer une erreur qui a echappé à JRB, si c'en est bien une: shearleader je connais pas, cheerleader ?