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[Ilona37]

Bonjour, j'aimerais de l'aide pour un exercice de rédaction. Je viens de taper un texte, et j'aimerais savoir si il y a des fautes. Je vous remercie d'avance

On account of these new technologies, whether internet or phones, alcohol, or parties (with drugs, cigarettes). I think, because of that, the adults have lost their authority. They are afraid of their children. it's .. regrettable, the parents feel less and less obliged to "put" limits. they are more and more numerous to go to see psychologist, they expect to have a .. miracle. the parents have more and more problems, money troubles (economic crisis, the rise in unemployment). They don't want any more to complicate things to educate their children. That is why, that the children have a total freedom. these parents have it enough, they leave their children free. I don't say that all the parents are irresponsible. Some still have values, they bring up their children. They put limits, (tout en leur laissant ?) a minimum of freedom. they have the intention of sending their children in a good school. everything begins in the education.

[yveslouis]

Bonjour, j'aimerais de l'aide pour un exercice de rédaction. Je viens de taper un texte, et j'aimerais savoir si il y a des fautes. Je vous remercie d'avance

On account of these new technologies, whether internet or phones, alcohol, or parties (je ne vois pas le lien entre les nouvelles technologies et l'acool ou la drogue)(with drugs, cigarettes). I think, because of that, the that adults have lost their authority. They are afraid of their children. It's .. (pourquoi des points de suspension ?) regrettable, the (l'article défini est nécessaire seulement si ce dont on parle est réellement défini) parents feel less and less obliged to "put" limits. They (Majuscule en début de phrase. Je te laisse corriger les autres) are more and more numerous to go to see consult psychologists, they expect to have a .. (pourquoi des points de suspension ?) miracle. the (voir plus haut : majuscule et emploi de "the") parents have more and more problems, money troubles (economic crisis, the rise in unemployment). They don't want any more to complicate things to educate their children (ta phrase n'a pas de sens évident). That is why, that the children have a total freedom. these parents have it enough are fed up with it, they leave their children free. I don't say that all the parents are irresponsible. Some still have values, they bring up their children. They put limits, (tout en leur laissant ? = while giving them) a minimum of freedom. they have the intention of sending (ça sens trop la construction "à la française) their children in a good school. everything begins in the education.