The Reality Show

[jayjaydu25]

Bonjour,

je souhaitrais que vous puissiez corriger mes fautes au cas où il y en a,

dans mon devoir maison à propos de la téléréalité.

"The rules of S.F : School Football is a reality show sports. The aim is to explore and discover the exciting world of football, Young football talent and trained them so they can start a career in club football on the world. The game principle is to select a few cities in the world to find to seeds of footballers. Participants must be between 15 and 18 years. During the first tape of each town matches détections will be held to allow the jury to select the best players participate in the second stage. The qualified players in all the cities come to Miami to complete in game of dames, while joining the training center. Once in training they will be candidates eliminated and only the best players will have the chance to partcicpats at the last stage where the player will be crowned winner. The winner of the game will win $500 000 and will receive trainig in the prestigious club of Barcalona.

The description of my ideal contestant is someone who made great effort to succeed, a very generous, very concentrated during the years, someone who thinks that fun to play football while sharing with his teammates, fair-play. And it especially deos not think it is superior to others"

Merci beaucoup!!!!!!!

[yveslouis]

Bonjour,

Je souhaiterais que vous puissiez corriger mes fautes au cas où il y en aurait (concordance des temps), dans mon devoir maison à propos de la téléréalité.

rouge : à supprimer

bleu : à ajouter

orange : commentaire

"The rules of S.F : School Football School is a sports reality show sports. The aim is to explore and discover the exciting world of football, (< un point ?) Young football talent and trained (quels sont le sujet et le verbe ?) them so they can start a career in a club football (le mot qui fait fonction d'adjectif passe devant le nom commun) on in the world. The game principle of the game is to select a few cities in the world to find to seeds of footballers. Participants must be between 15 and 18 years old. During the first tape (que veux-tu dire ?) of each town matches détections will be held to allow the jury to select the best players who will participate in the second stage. The qualified players in all the cities come to Miami to complete (compete ?) in game of dames draughts, while joining the training center. Once in training they will be candidates eliminated and only the best players will have the chance to partcicpats (?!) at in the last stage where the player will be crowned winner. The winner of the game will win $500,000 and will receive training in the prestigious club of Barcalona.

The description of my ideal contestant is someone who made (Es-tu sûr qu'il faille un passé ?) great effort to succeed, a very generous, very concentrated (Un adjectif ne peut être employé comme nom. "generous person...") during throughout the years, someone who thinks that it is fun to play football while sharing with his teammates, fair-play (À quoi se rattache "fair-play" ?). And it ("it" pour le joueur ? /uploads/emoticons/default_blink.png">/uploads/emoticons/default_blink.png">/uploads/emoticons/default_blink.png">/uploads/emoticons/default_blink.png">/uploads/emoticons/default_blink.png">http://www.e-bahut.com/uploads/emoticons/default_blink.png' alt=':blink:'> ) especially deos not think it (voir plus haut) is superior to others"

Merci beaucoup!!!!!!!