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[Invité Elodie-57]

Bonjour,

Je doit rediger un article de journal sur un accident de bus et voici ce que j'ai fait :

The thirteenth February, George who is bus driver for two years have got a big accident because he had took drug and alcohl.When it is produced he was spirit to drive thirty two teenagers in their high school for fifteen minuts.

Then he arrived in a wall the bus used physical force in order to stop the bus.And everybody is yelling.

The consequence is six students is dead, twelve students is shocked.As for the bus driver test a leg.He switch by his work since was obliged to do community service.

Si vous pourrez me le corriger se serait super !

[yveslouis]

Bonjour,

Je doit rediger un article de journal sur un accident de bus et voici ce que j'ai fait :

The thirteenth February, George who is bus driver for two years have got a big accident because he had took drug and alcohl.When it is produced he was spirit to drive thirty two teenagers in their high school for fifteen minuts.

Then he arrived in a wall the bus used physical force in order to stop the bus.And everybody is yelling.

The consequence is six students is dead, twelve students is shocked.As for the bus driver test a leg.He switch by his work since was obliged to do community service.

Si vous pourrez me le corriger se serait super !