Robot-rock Posté(e) le 5 novembre 2009 Signaler Posté(e) le 5 novembre 2009 Bonjours à tous, j'ai un écrit à rendre en anglais.. j'ai commencé, mais je n'ai plus beaucoup d'idées concernant le sujet..et par ailleurs, je pense avoir fait une bonne quantité de faute dans le peu que j'ai déjà pu écrire.. Donc si quelqu'un pouvait faire une petite correction rapide, ce serai très gentil ! Le sujet est : In your opinion, can young people benefit from the experience of adults ? Il faut rendre une réponse de minimum 300mots.. Pour le moment, voilà mon debut : I think that it's very important that young people can benefit from the experience of adults because adults have already made the mistakes that young people haven't to reproduce... It's for that, adults have to speak with young people for explain them how life is difficult and how they have to do for living without problem. Adults know what are dangerous and what are bad to do, so it's normal that they can teach young people before they will do bad things. Everybody need to have somebody to explain what is life.. It's normal that is more difficult for orphan children to participate to active life because they can't benefit all the time from the experience of their parents. The adults transmit their knowledge and they make young people want to do studies, sport... They already can transmit their culture, their past history, lot of thing which is very interesting for the young's personal culture. But it’s important to take into account that s young people don’t need all the time of the advice from the adults, because sometime they have to discover life by themself.. and it’s important to do make mistake in life, no one can run before walk, they have right to make mistake ! Making mistakes is the key to making progress. Huuum, voilà, bon je vais finir ça, il me manque encore une centaine de mots -__-" Merci d'avance si vous pouvez corriger les fautes, et les expressions mal formulées..
E-Bahut yveslouis Posté(e) le 6 novembre 2009 E-Bahut Signaler Posté(e) le 6 novembre 2009 Bonjours à tous, j'ai un écrit à rendre en anglais.. j'ai commencé, mais je n'ai plus beaucoup d'idées concernant le sujet..et par ailleurs, je pense avoir fait une bonne quantité de fautes (eh oui !) dans le peu que j'ai déjà pu écrire.. Donc si quelqu'un pouvait faire une petite correction rapide, ce serait très gentil ! Le sujet est : In your opinion, can young people benefit from the experience of adults ? Il faut rendre une réponse de minimum 300mots.. Pour le moment, voilà mon début : I think that it's very important that young people can should benefit from the experience of adults because adults have already made the mistakes that young people haven't to shouldn't reproduce... It's for that, That's why adults have to speak with young people for to explain to them how life is difficult and how what they have to do for living to live without problem (ou : to avoid trouble). Adults know what are is dangerous and what are is bad to do, so it's normal that they can should teach young people before they will do bad things. Everybody needs to have somebody to explain what is life is (ce n'est pas une question) . It's normal Of course, that is more difficult for orphan children to participate to active life because they can't benefit all the time from the experience of their parents (comment pourraient-ils en bénéficier tout le temps, puisqu'ils sont orphelins ?) . The aAdults transmit their knowledge and they make young people want to do studies, sport... Now, they They already can transmit their culture, their past history, lots of things which is are very interesting for the young's personal culture. But it’s important to take into account that s young people don’t need all the time of the advice from the adults, because sometimes they have to discover life by themselves.. and it’s important to do make mistakes in life, (commence une nouvelle phrase ici) no one can run before walking, they have the right to make mistakes! Making mistakes is the key to making progress. Huuum, voilà, bon je vais finir ça, il me manque encore une centaine de mots -__-" Merci d'avance si vous pouvez corriger les fautes, et les expressions mal formulées..
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