Correction D'un Mail

[chacha7611]

Bonjour à tous, me revoila pour vous soumettre un petit mail que je devais faire pour le cours d'anglais, si vous pouvez m'indiquer mes fautes

Cordialement,

have a nice day!

To: staff.vfc@vfc.com, team.efa@efa.fr

From: brice.r@efa.fr

Subject: Finance package for VFC’s film

Dear all,

After the meeting of the 24th of March with the directors of European Finance Associates (John Smith, Brian Obama, Charly Risse) and the director and executive producer of Vision Film Company ( Nigel Fraser and Roger Marris), we have decided to accord a loan to VFC following different points.

First of all, EFA is agreed to offer a loan of $5.5 million to VFC to produce a drama film set in post-war Europe. However, we agreed that VFC has to repay the investment within five years of the launch of the film and we want to have 70% of the net profits of the film. In fact, it is a high risk investment and it is an important loan for a small and inexperienced company in the world of producing film. Moreover, the film has to be launch in March 2011 to be presented at the Sundance Film Festival.

The second point of discussion was about the schedule. According to the production schedule and the needs of VFC, the loan will be paid like this: 20% in July 2009 for the pre-production, 45% in March 2010 before the principal photography, 20% in June 2010 at the end of the principal photography and 15% in July 2010 when the laboratory work is completed.

The third point of discussion of this meeting was the choice of director. Actually, VFC wanted to have a director with a high level of knowledge in the producing area. Nevertheless, thanks to his remarkable script for the film, we have decided to let the present director direct the film. However, EFA keeps the right to choose one of the two principal actors. In fact, we think that if one of them is an European star it should increase the profit of the film and also attract major distributors.

Another point of discussion was about the distribution of the film. Actually, it is one of the harder parts in producing film. That is why, EFA lets VFC to deal with it but if things go wrong or if VFC does not find any distributors, EFA will deal with it, and a re-negotiation of the terms of the contract will be necessary.

The last point of discussion was about the artistic independence. Thanks to a very good idea for this film and a good script, EFA will not interfere in it. EFA wanted only some “flashback” war scenes in order to attract younger film-goers.

If you have any questions, do not hesitate to send me an e-mail and I will try to answer you as soon as possible.

Kind regards,

Brice Rights

Director of European Finance Associates

[Jean B]

Bonjour à tous, me revoila pour vous soumettre un petit mail que je devais faire pour le cours d'anglais, si vous pouvez m'indiquer mes fautes

Cordialement,

have a nice day!

To: staff.vfc@vfc.com, team.efa@efa.fr

From: brice.r@efa.fr

Subject: Finance package for VFC’s film

Dear all,

After the meeting of March 24 with the directors of European Finance Associates (John Smith, Brian Obama, Charly Risse) and the director and executive producer of Vision Film Company ( Nigel Fraser and Roger Marris), we have decided to accord a loan to VFC following different points.

First of all, EFA is agreed to offer a loan of $5.5 million to VFC to produce a drama film set in post-war Europe. However, we agreed that VFC has to repay the investment within five years of the launch of the film and we want to have 70% of the net profits of the film. In fact, it is a high risk investment and it is an important loan for a small and inexperienced company in the world of producing film. Moreover, the film has to be launched in March 2011 to be presented at the Sundance Film Festival.

The second point of discussion was about the schedule. According to the production schedule and the needs of VFC, the loan will be paid like this: 20% in July 2009 for the pre-production, 45% in March 2010 before the principal photography, 20% in June 2010 at the end of the principal photography and 15% in July 2010 when the laboratory work is completed.

The third point of discussion of this meeting was the choice of director. Actually, VFC wanted to have a director with a high level of knowledge in the producing area. Nevertheless, thanks to his remarkable script for the film, we have decided to let the present director direct the film. However, EFA keeps the right to choose one of the two principal actors. In fact, we think that if one of them is a European star it should increase the profit of the film and also attract major distributors.

Another point of discussion was about the distribution of the film. Actually, it is one of the harder parts in producing film. That is why, EFA lets VFC to deal with it but if things go wrong or if VFC does not find any distributors, EFA will deal with it, and a re-negotiation of the terms of the contract will be necessary.

The last point of discussion was about the artistic independence. Thanks to a very good idea for this film and a good script, EFA will not interfere in it. EFA wanted only some “flashback” war scenes in order to attract younger film-goers.

If you have any questions, do not hesitate to send me an e-mail and I will try to answer you as soon as possible.

Kind regards,

Brice Rights

Director of European Finance Associates

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Bonjour à tous, me revoila pour vous soumettre un petit mail que je devais faire pour le cours d'anglais, si vous pouvez m'indiquer mes fautes

Cordialement,

have a nice day!

To: staff.vfc@vfc.com, team.efa@efa.fr

From: brice.r@efa.fr

Subject: Finance package for VFC’s film

Dear all,

After the meeting of March 24 with the directors of European Finance Associates (John Smith, Brian Obama, Charly Risse) and the director and executive producer of Vision Film Company ( Nigel Fraser and Roger Marris), we have decided to accord a loan to VFC following different points.

First of all, EFA is agreed to offer a loan of $5.5 million to VFC to produce a drama film set in post-war Europe. However, we agreed that VFC has to repay the investment within five years of the launch of the film and we want to have 70% of the net profits of the film. In fact, it is a high risk investment and it is an important loan for a small and inexperienced company in the world of producing film. Moreover, the film has to be launched in March 2011 to be presented at the Sundance Film Festival.

The second point of discussion was about the schedule. According to the production schedule and the needs of VFC, the loan will be paid like this: 20% in July 2009 for the pre-production, 45% in March 2010 before the principal photography, 20% in June 2010 at the end of the principal photography and 15% in July 2010 when the laboratory work is completed.

The third point of discussion of this meeting was the choice of director. Actually, VFC wanted to have a director with a high level of knowledge in the producing area. Nevertheless, thanks to his remarkable script for the film, we have decided to let the present director direct the film. However, EFA keeps the right to choose one of the two principal actors. In fact, we think that if one of them is a European star it should increase the profit of the film and also attract major distributors.

Another point of discussion was about the distribution of the film. Actually, it is one of the harder parts in producing film. That is why, EFA lets VFC deal with it but if things go wrong or if VFC does not find any distributors, EFA will deal with it, and a re-negotiation of the terms of the contract will be necessary.

The last point of discussion was about the artistic independence. Thanks to a very good idea for this film and a good script, EFA will not interfere in it. EFA wanted only some “flashback” war scenes in order to attract younger film-goers.

If you have any questions, do not hesitate to send me an e-mail and I will try to answer you as soon as possible.

Kind regards,

Brice Rights

Director of European Finance Associates

[yveslouis]

Bonjour.

J'aurais bien vu "film producing" à la place de "producing film" ainsi que "was the choice of the director". Et, pourquoi pas "EFA only wanted only some..."

Qu'en pensez-vous ?

[chacha7611]

Merci à tous pour votre aide!!

Mon anglais semble s'améliorer...Je pense que mon semestre Erasmus que je suis entrain de faire n'y est pas tout à fait étranger^^

Merci à tous,

Bonne journée