Pouvez Vous Me Corriger, ,svp ? (c'est Assez Urgent )

[wrsandrine]

Bonsoir,

Pouvez-vous me corriger, svp ?

Merci d'avance

I had many fears in my life: when a friend put in front of me a little snake locked in a bottle up or when I found a big spider in my shoes. But that day, I was really frightened! It occurred during the summer holidays, in Bordeaux, in my cousins' house. The morning Rosine, my cousin and I made some shopping, we went to the beach ... In brief, it was a wonderful day, we really enjoyed it! After having the dinner in a Chineese restaurant, Rosine and I decided to watch a horror film (I like horror movies but I can't the alone in the dark!) So, we chose "Blair Witch Project 1" which deals about 3 students in cinema who wanted to realize a report about a witch. They go in the woods to find more information about her; but they get lost and vanish there, they only let behind them the movies they shot. The movie ended at 11:00 pm. And of course, my aunt asked me to bring the bin out at this time. After the horror film, I was a little scared to go out alone. So I asked Rosine, who is younger than me, to come with me. I turned the light on in the stairs and I wanted to open the entry door but it was blocked (I must precise you that we lived on the first floor and there was a restaurant on the ground floor). While my cousin was trying to open it, I heard a noise (my heart started to beat). Behind us, I saw a face looking at us, in the dark. I was frightened that I screamed, my cousin who didn't understand what happened shouted after me. I threw the bin and ran as fast as possible in the stairs, followed by Rosine. We went back at home and locked the door. I told my aunt and my cousin that I saw a face in the dark. Of course, they didn't believe me I asked her to check the ground floor. In fact, it was just the owner of the restaurant who had wanted to help us to open the door. After that, I felt ridiculous and apologized the owner for the mess I made (because the bin was spread in the floor.)

Quand, je résume un film dans un texte au passé, je dois utiliser le passé ou le présent ??

[lily-21]

Utilisez le passé !

[yveslouis]

Bonsoir,

Pouvez-vous me corriger, svp ?

Merci d'avance

I had many fears in my life: when a friend put a little snake locked up in a bottle in front of me <a little snake locked in a bottle up> (Le C.O.D se place immédiatement après le verbe) or when I found a big spider in my shoes. But that day, I was really frightened! It occurred during the summer holidays, in Bordeaux, in my cousins' house. <The> In the morning Rosine, my cousin and I made some shopping, we went to the beach ... In brief, it was a wonderful day, we really enjoyed it! After having <the> dinner in a Chine<e>se restaurant, Rosine and I decided to watch a horror film (I like horror movies but I can't (the ?) alone in the dark!) So, we chose "Blair Witch Project 1" which deals about 3 <students in> cinema students who wanted to realize a report about a witch. They <go> went into the woods to find more information about her; but they <get> lost and <vanish there> disappeared, (Et si on commençait une nouvelle phrase ici ? ;o) ) . They only left the movies they had shot behind them (/All they left were the movies they had shot.). the movies they shot (Le C.O.D se place immédiatement après le verbe). The movie ended at 11:00 pm. And of course, my aunt asked me to <bring> take the bin out at <this time> that moment. After the horror film, I was a little scared to go out alone. So I asked Rosine, who is younger than me, to come with me. I turned the light on in the stairs and I wanted to open the <entry> front door but it was blocked (I must precise you that we lived on the first floor and there was a restaurant on the ground floor). While my cousin was trying to open it (open the restaurant ? ;o)) ) , I heard a noise (my heart started to beat). Behind us, I saw a face looking at us, in the dark. I was frightened so that I screamed, my cousin who didn't understand what <happened> was happening <shouted after me> started shouting in her turn . I threw the bin away and ran as fast as possible <in> up the stairs, followed by Rosine. We went back <at> home and locked the door. I told my aunt and my cousin that I <saw> had seen (comme en français : ...que j'avais vu...) a face in the dark. Of course, they didn't believe me. I asked her (Mais elles sont deux !) to check the ground floor. In fact, it was just the owner of the restaurant who had wanted to help us to open the door. After that, I felt ridiculous and apologized the owner for the mess I had made (because the bin was spread in the floor.)

Quand, je résume un film dans un texte au passé, je dois utiliser le passé ou le présent ?? Emploie le preterit et le pluperfect.