Correction

[Droiide42]

Bonjour à tous.

On a un Dm d'anglais à faire pendant les vacances qui nous demande si les parents sont trop indulgents de nos jours ?

Cette fois ci, j'ai écouté les conseil de JRB et j'ai tout fait à la main sans passer par le français donc je ne sais pas se que sa va donner.

Merci à tous ceux qui pourront me corriger.

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Nowadays, there are a lots of parents are easy-going with their children and that on numerous point of view.

Firstly, on the point of view school. Indeed, numerous parents not to interfer their children like he want in a school. Like this the children go to be easy satisfied and go to distrub their shool friends.

Secondly, on the point of view tonight. Nowodays, a lots of childrens go out with thier friends without to ask a permission and the most of the time, the parents don't to discuss or question with the children and so don't tell of him: A children is to strat again.

Thirdly, on the point of view pocket money. Numerous parents give her children a pocket money and the most of the time, don't to call that 'pocket money': a sum considerable (50€ for month). Later, with the pocket money a children go to buy a cigarette, a alcohol or a drug.

Fourthly, on the point of view healty. Indeed nowadays, a lots of parents see their children an unhealthy and don't be nothing (I speak with full knowledge of the facts: my cousin is bulimic and his parents don't move) what can become dangerously.

Finally, all the problem a different point of view come the children education. In this way, the most parents are easy-going, cool with thier children, the most children are terrible because they don't a limit.

Merci d'avance

[yveslouis]

Nowadays, <there are> a lot<s> of parents are easy-going with their children <and that on numerous point of view> ABOUT SEVERAL MATTERS.

Firstly, <on the point of view> AS REGARDS school. Indeed, numerous parents not to interferE their children like he want (??? Je ne comprends pas ce que tu veux dire - de plus "children" est pluriel, "he" est singulier) in a school. <Like this> THUS the children <go to> WILL be easILy satisfied and <go to> WILL disturb their shool friends. (Ce n'est pas très clair non plus.)

Secondly, on the point of view tonight (??? Je ne comprends pas ce que tu veux dire) . NowAdays, a lot<s> of children<s> go out with their friends without <to> askING <a> permission and <the> most of the time, the parents don't <to> discuss or ASK THEM questionS <with the children> and so don't tell of him: <A> THE child<ren> is to strat (???) again.

Thirdly, <on the point of view> AS REGARDS money. Numerous parents give <her> THEIR children <a> (SOME) pocket money and <the> most of the time, don't <to> call that 'pocket money': a sum considerable (l'adjectif AVANT le nom) (50€ <for> A month). Later, with the pocket money a child<ren go to> WILL buy <a> cigaretteS, <a> alcohol or <a> drugS.

Fourthly, <on the point of view> AS REGARDS HEALTH. Indeed nowadays, a lot<s> of parents see their children <an> ARE unhealthy and THEY don't <be nothing > DO ANYTHING (I speak with full knowledge of the facts: my cousin is bulimic and his parents don't <move> REACT) <what can > , WHICH MAY become dangerous<ly>.

Finally, all the problemS a different point of view come the children education (Que veux-tu donc dire ?) . In this way, the <most> MORE <parents are> easy-going<,> AND cool with <thier> THEIR children (THE) PARENTS ARE, the <most> TERRIBLE children are <terrible> because they don't GET a limit.

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Beaucoup de fautes et ton texte est parfois incompréhensible. J'ai fait de mon mieux. Essaie de l'améliorer encore.

[Droiide42]

Merci, c'est très sympa à toi de m'avoir répondu.

[yveslouis]

You're welcome!

As-tu pu apporter des modifications à ton texte ?

[Droiide42]

Je suis entrain.

Que me proposez vous pour améliorer mon anglais? Parce que là c'est vraiment médiocre.