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[chaoui]

Bonjour,

je viens de traduire le texte ci-dessous en anglais mais j'ai un doute au niveau de la conjugaison des temps et de quelques passage que j'ai traduis celon le sens. est-ce que quelqu'un peux me le retraduire en corrigeant mes erreurs. Je l'ai besoin pour mardi. merci pour toutes réponses.

Quand Gladys entra dans le café, elle portait une valise dans chaque main. Marc Alby se leva, Gladys posa ses valises, Juliette alluma une autre cigarette, j’ôtai mes lunettes et essuyai les verres avec un mouchoir en papier. Mon ami fit les présentations. Gladys m’embrassa du bout des lèvres sur la joue et serra la main de Juliette. Elle s’assit à côté de moi, mit ses coudes sur la table, tendit son visage vers mon ami et dit sur un ton de doux reproche :

-Chéri, j’ai comme l’impression que tu me trompes.

- C’est une erreur, dit Juliette. Marc et moi sommes de simples amis.

- Alors tu ne sais pas ce que tu perds: Marc est un amant merveilleux !

- On le dit, fit mon ami avant de porter son verre vide à sa bouche et de faire craquer le glaçon sous ses dents.

- Arrête! s’écria Gladys. Tu me donnes des frissons. Qu’est-ce qu’on fait?

- Tu bois quelque chose ?

- Un diabolo-menthe.

Gladys portait un pantalon et une veste rouges. Ses cheveux étaient bruns et bouclés. Elle avait un visage rond avec des traits qui étaient harmonieux sans être particulièrement fins.

Sur le moment, j’aurais été incapable de décrire le visage de la jeune fille.

- Allons danser, proposa Marc Alby.

- Je suis fatiguée, dit Juliette. Le métro, ça m’épuise.

Traduction

When Gladys entered the coffe she carried a bag in each hand. Marc Alby rose, Gladys put down her bags, Juliette lit up another cigarette, .I toke off = (remove) my glasses and wiped glasses with a paper hanky. My friend (introduce us) = made the presentations. Gladys embraced me on the cheek and shook hand of Juliette. She sat down beside me, put her elbows on the table, tightened her face towards my friend and reproachfully said:

“Darling, I feel as if you betray me.”

“It’s a mistake," say Juliette, "Marc and me are only friends.”

“So, you don’t know what you lose: Marc is a marvellous lover!”

“It is say” said my friend before carrying his empty glass to his mouth and breaking up the ice cube with his teeth.

“Stop,” exclaim = (cry out )Glasys, “ you make me shudder. What we do?”

“You drink something.”

“Lemonade and mint.”

Gladys wore a red trousers and jacket. She had got brown and curly hair. Her face was round with harmonious features but without been particularly refined.

On the fly, I should have been unable to describe her face.

“Shall we go dancing,” suggested Marc Alby.

“I’m tired,” said Julliette, “the subway exhausts me.”

Patrick Besson: Letter for a lost friend.

[yveslouis]

Hello!

<...> = à supprimer

MAJUSCULES = à ajouter

When Gladys entered the <coffe> CAFE she <carried> WAS CARRYING a bag in each hand. Marc Alby <rose> STOOD UP, Gladys put down her bags, Juliette lit up another cigarette. I <toke> TOOK off my glasses and wiped THE glasses with a paper hanky. My friend <(introduce us) = made the presentations> INTRODUCED US. Gladys <embraced> KISSED me RELUCTANTLY on <the> MY cheek and shook handS <of> WITH Juliette. She sat down beside me, put her elbows on the table, <tightened> TURNED her face towards my friend and reproachfully said:

“Darling, I feel as if you ARE betrayING me.”

“It’s a mistake," say Juliette, "Marc and <me> I are only friends.”

“<So> THEN, you don’t know what you ARE <lose> MISSING: Marc is a marvellous lover!”

“<It is> SO THEY say” said my friend before <carrying> TAKING his empty glass to his mouth and breaking up the ice cube with his teeth.

“Stop IT,” <exclaim = (cry out )> GlaDys CRIED OUT, “ you make me shudder. What SHALL we do?”

“<You drink something.> WILL YOU HAVE SOMETHING TO DRINK?”

“<Lemonade and mint.> MINT AND LEMONADE.”

Gladys <wore> WAS WEARING <a> red trousers and A RED jacket. She had got brown, <and> curly hair. Her face was round with harmonious features but without <been> BEING particularly refined.

<On the fly> AT THE TIME, I <should> WOULD have been unable to describe <her> THE YOUNG GIRL'S face.

“Shall we go dancing?,” <suggested> Marc Alby SUGGESTED.

“I’m tired,” <said> Julliette SAID<,>. “The subway exhausts me.”

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[chaoui]

Bonjour,

Merci bien grand maître pour cette correction. Là je remarque toutes mes erreurs et tout est bien clair. Merci encore. Bonne journée.

[yveslouis]

You're welcome!