Correction De Mon Texte

[cafécanelle]

Bonjour, j'aurais besoin de votre aide pour corriger mes fautes, SVP! Car c'est un devoir que je dois rendre pour mercredi et la prof nous a donner le sujet qu'aujourd'hui donc je suis un peu stessée, mon niveau n'est pas très élevé en anglais! Voici le texte que j'ai conçu:(désolée pour les multiples fautes!)

It can be assumed that the woman was in fact the wife of the murdered man. The woman reportedly discovered the infidelity of her husband on Christmas Eve, feeling humiliated, it would concoct a plan to take revenge on his man and forced him to confess his infidelity. His plan was simple: she wanted the scare by threatening with a gun to get him to tell the truth. On Christmas Eve she put his plan into effect she waited with her husband, absent a few moments to catch his pistol that's when she heard noises coming from the living room resembled those in a dispute between two people, it felt distinctly the voice of her husband and that of a woman, then all a sudden there was a shot, she came down in haste, the weapon in his hand and saw with horror her husband extended to the ground, murdered. She had time to see the silhouette of the murderer to flee, a feminine silhouette. Blinded by fear she instinctively fired on it and saw with amazement the latter was captured and fell to the ground. She remained paralyzed and could not make any gestures, holding the handgun with full force in his hand. With a burst of lucidity woman decided to alert the authorities, but before that, she deleting all the evidence which proved that she had murdered the woman. As coroner she had no trouble erasing his fingerprints. Indeed after conducting their investigation police found no evidence of any murder had committed the wife and concluded that after the man killed the other woman had committed suicide. The widow discredited pulled them all suspicions.

The message of the artist was I think the possibility of creating a perfect murder, establishes a woman who usually plays the role of the victim instead of the murderer. And also I think the artist wanted to show that revenge may lead anyone to commit the irreparable.

Je vous remercie d'avance!

[yveslouis]

Bonjour, j'aurais besoin de votre aide pour corriger mes fautes, SVP! Car c'est un devoir que je dois rendre pour mercredi et la prof NE nous a <donner> DONNE le sujet qu'aujourd'hui donc je suis un peu stRessée, mon niveau n'est pas très élevé en anglais! Voici le texte que j'ai conçu:(désolée pour les multiples fautes!)

<...> = à supprimer

MAJUSCULES = à ajouter

(???) = Je ne comprends pas.

It can be assumed that the woman was in fact the wife of the murdered man. The woman reportedly discovered the infidelity of her husband on Christmas Eve<,>. Feeling humiliated, <it> SHE would <concoct> IMAGINE a plan to take revenge on <his> HER man and force<d> him to confess his infidelity. <His> HER plan was simple: she wanted <the> TO scare HIM by threatening HIM with a gun to get him to tell the truth. On Christmas Eve she put <his> HER plan into effect. --Mets-tu quelquefois des points ? -- She waited with her husband, <absent> LEFT FOR a few moments/A WHILE to catch/SEIZE <his> HER pistol. <that's> THAT'S when she heard <noises> A NOISE coming from the living room <resembled those in a dispute> SOUNDING LIKE AN ARGUMENT between two people<,>. <it> SHE <felt> HEARD distinctly the voice of her husband and that of a woman<,>. <then> THEN, all OF a sudden there was a shot, she came down in haste, the weapon in <his> HER hand and saw with horror her husband <extended to > LYING on the ground, murdered. She had time to see the silhouette of the murderer <to flee> FLEEING, a feminine silhouette. Blinded by fear she instinctively fired on it and saw with amazement the latter was captured (???) and fell to the ground. She remained paralysed and could not make any gestures, holding the handgun with full force in <his> HER hand. With a burst of lucidity THE woman decided to <alert the authorities> CALL THE POLICE, but before that, she <deleting>DELETED all the evidenceS which proved that she had murdered the woman. As A coroner she had no trouble erasing <his> HER fingerprints. Indeed after conducting their investigation THE police found no evidence of <any> A murder <had> committed BY the wife and concluded that after the man HAD killed the other woman, HE had committed suicide. The DISCREDITED widow <discredited> pulled them all suspicions (???).

The message of the artist was, I think, the possibility of creating a perfect murder<,>. HE establishes a woman who usually plays the role of the victim instead of the murderer. And <also> I ALSO think the artist wanted to show that revenge may lead anyone to commit the irreparable.

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Je t'envoie toute une caisse de "." pour que tu fasses des phrases plus courtes.

D'autre part, il te faut assimiler l'adjectif possessif féminin : HER ainsi que le pronom sujet : SHE

[cafécanelle]

Merci pour votre aide! Et désolée pour les points; ça a toujours été mon problème, même en français! En tous les encore merci et à bientôt!

[yveslouis]

You're welcome! B)