Petites Corrections De Fautes

[chacha7611]

Bien le bonjour, j'ai une rédaction en anglais et j'aimerai avoir le moins de fautes possibles...Donc si vous pouvez m'aider à en retirer certaines cela serait sympatique ;==

This article, deals with the problem of child labour in Asia for next Olympics games. Indeed, a report highlights the fact that factories are using child labour, forced overtime and low wages to boost their profit.

This practice is not new. In fact, child labour is a social problem associated with the rise of industrial production and capitalism. It appeared in agricultural societies, but during the Industrial Revolution of the 18th century in Great Britain it was especially significant and people began to denounce this problem. It was one of the biggest scandals of the 19th century, and every industrialized country was concerned. Many younger children, who have less than ten years old, were employed by factories and mines. They were forced to work during long hours with dangerous conditions for a little wage.

In England in the 19th century, about 2,000,000 school-age children were working 50- to 70-hour weeks. Most of them came from poor families. In this country, a series of laws try to stop this problem. So working hours were reduced, working conditions were better and very young children can not work. Every European and northern American countries with the obligation of schooling in the end of the 19th century, for children of 16 years old have a very great impact to stop child labour in these countries.

But nowadays, while the childcare prohibits the child labour some of countries continue to use children in their factories. It is a way for very poor family to earn money. But often, these children are exploited, their works are very dangerous and they earn a little wage. So in this case there is just a winner (not parents) but only big factories. They pay nearly nothing these children for there long hours at work. Companies which do this thing prefer boost their profit even if, this method is prohibited. Some people think of they never buy a product made by children, but I am not sure on that. Indeed, factories like Nike or Adidas are suspected on using children in their factories located in Asia. For these factories, convictions are very insignificant compared with their fortune and their army of lawyer.

To conclude, children are not destined to work, particularly dangerous work. Although they are destined to play with their friend, laugh, learn a lot of things at school and have moustache when they drink some milk.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Quelques "dérapages incontrôlés" et néanmoins superflus signalés en rouge.

Le vert, par contre, étant associé à l'espérance...

(0) signale l'article zéro, c'est-à-dire l'omission de "the".

Suggestion : relis-toi attentivement et tu élimineras certaines horreurs par toi-même.

Conclusion : sans le moindre doute, "peut encore mieux faire"...

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Bien le bonjour, j'ai une rédaction en anglais et j'aimerai avoir le moins de fautes possibles...Donc si vous pouvez m'aider à en retirer certaines cela serait sympatique ;==

This article, deals with the problem of child labour in Asia for the next Olympics games. Indeed, a report highlights the fact that factories are using child labour, forced overtime and low wages to boost their profit.

This practice is not new. In fact, child labour is a social problem associated with the rise of industrial production and capitalism. It appeared in agricultural societies, but during the Industrial Revolution of the 18th century in Great Britain it was especially significant and people began to denounce this problem. It was one of the biggest scandals of the 19th century, and every industrialized country was concerned. Many younger children, who have(/uploads/emoticons/default_inferieur.gif">/uploads/emoticons/default_inferieur.gif">/uploads/emoticons/default_inferieur.gif">/uploads/emoticons/default_inferieur.gif">/uploads/emoticons/default_inferieur.gif">http://www.e-bahut.com/uploads/emoticons/default_inferieur.gif' alt='<='>(au piquet, vilain !) were less than ten years old, were employed by factories and mines. They were forced to work during long hours with dangerous conditions for a little wage.

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But nowadays, while the(0) childcare prohibits the(0) child labour some of countries continue to use children in their factories. It is a way for very poor families to earn money. But often, these children are exploited, their tasks are very dangerous and they earn a little wage. So in this case there is just a winner (not parents) but only big factories. They pay nearly nothing these children for their (!) long hours at work. Companies which do so/behave in such a way prefer to boost their profit even if this method is prohibited. Some people think of they will never buy a product made by children, but I am not sure on that. Indeed, factories like Nike or Adidas are suspected on using children in their factories located in Asia. For these factories, convictions are very insignificant compared with their fortune and their army of lawyers.

To conclude, children are not destined to work, particularly dangerous work. Although On the contrary,they are destined to play with their friends, laugh, learn a lot of things at school and have a moustache when they drink some milk.

[yveslouis]

Hello!

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This practice is not new. In fact, child labour is a social problem associated with the rise of industrial production and capitalism. It appeared in agricultural societies, but during the Industrial Revolution of the 18th century in Great Britain it was especially significant and people began to denounce this problem. It was one of the biggest scandals of the 19th century, and every industrialized country was concerned. Many younger children, who <have> WERE less than ten years old, were employed by factories and mines. They were forced to work during long hours with dangerous conditions for a little wage.

In England in the 19th century, about 2,000,000 school-ageD children <were working> WOULD WORK FOR 50 to 70 hourS A week<s>. Most of them came from poor families. In this country, a series of <laws> ACTS <try> TRIED to stop this problem. So working hours were reduced, working conditions were betterED and very young children <can> COULD not work ANYMORE. Every European and northern American countries, <with> THANKS TO the obligation of schooling in the end of the 19th century for children <of> UNDER 16 <years old> have HAD a very great impact to stop child labour in these countries.

But nowadays, while <the> childcare prohibits <the> child labour, some <of> countries continue to use children in their factories. It is a way for very poor family to earn money. But often, these children are exploited, their <works> JOBS are very dangerous and they earn <a little wage> VERY LITTLE MONEY. So in this <case> CONDITION, there is <just> ONLY <a> ONE winner : <(>not parents<)> but only big factories. They pay THESE CHILDREN nearly nothing <these children> for <there> THEIR long hours at work. Companies which <do this thing> ACT LIKE THIS prefer boostING their profitS even if<,> this method is prohibited. Some people think <of> they'LL never buy a product made by children, but I am not sure <on> ABOUT that. Indeed, factories like Nike or Adidas are suspected <on> OF using children in their factories located in Asia. For these factories, convictions are very insignificant/WEAK compared <with> TO their <fortune> MONEY and their army of lawyerS.

To conclude, I'LL SAY THAT children are not destined to work, particularly WHEN IT COMES TO dangerous work. <Although> ON THE CONTRARY, they are destined to play with their friendS, laugh, learn a lot of things at school and have moustache when they drink <some> milk.

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[yveslouis]

Damned! 3 minutes sooner and I would have been first.

Who's the fastest man on the draw? JRB is!

[Jean B]

Damned! 3 minutes sooner and I would have been first.

Who's the fastest man on the draw? JRB is!

[chacha7611]

thank you very much for your help

Have nice weekend

[Jean B]

thank you very much for your help

Have nice weekend