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[leamichEL]

Bonjour bon dimanche à tous ,

J'avais poster le même type de sujet qui concernent d'ailleurs .

J'ai  choisit le 1° imagine the end of the story (80words)

Jerry and his wife moved away from the bottom , after recovering the camera, several space aliens were gathered together they were motionless looking at Jerry and his wife they were running towards their car  in order to escape from this strange place. His wife felt something touching her back then she turned and she saw an alien she screamed with all her might and jerry pushed her out of her alien.Both couples get i n the car and that strange place.

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Quand tu fais le récit d'un évènement passé, terminé, sans lien avec le présent, il faut employer obligatoirement le prétérit simple ou/et progressif.

Revois également les règles de la ponctuation car tu as la fâcheuse tendance à écrire des phrases à rallonges interminables et ce n'est pas bon.

Enfin, révise sérieusement les règles d'emploi du prétérit ainsi que les verbes irréguliers que tu dois connaître par coeur, c'est essentiel.

After recovering the camera, Jerry and his wife moved away from the bottom.  < le fond de quoi ? Qu'as-tu voulu dire ? Nouvelle phrase > Several space aliens were gathered together, they were stood motionless looking at Jerry and his wife. Nouvelle phrase > They were running ran towards their car  in order to escape from this strange place. His Jerry's wife felt something touching her back, then she turned round and she saw an alien; she screamed with all her might strength and Jerry pushed her out of her < ce n'est pas le sien > the alien's reach. Both couples Jerry and his wife get got into the car and drove away from that strange place. (84 mots pour 80)

[leamichEL]

Bonjour ,

je prends note !

After recovering the camera, Jerry and his wife moved away from the bottom.  < le fond de quoi ? Qu'as-tu voulu dire ?

Plus précisément , je voulais dire : " Jerry et sa femme se sont éloignés du lieu , parce qu'ils étaient très terrifiée de voir des extraterrestres. "

(84 mots pour 80) < du coup je modifie ? est - ce grave si je laisse les 84 mots?

 

 

 

 

 

[Jean B]

Il y a 19 heures, maelis a dit :

Bonjour ,

je prends note !

After recovering the camera, Jerry and his wife moved away from the bottom the place.  < Tout simplement.

(84 mots pour 80) < du coup je modifie ? est - ce grave si je laisse les 84 mots? < Non, on ne va sûrement pas pinailler pour 4 mots en trop !