Notion spaces and exchanges

[Nightwing]

Bonjour quelqu'un peut m'aider à corriger ma notion car je pense avoir fait beaucoup de fautes et je passe à l'oral dans 1 semaine merci de votre aide 

INTRO/

I’m going to talk about the notion of spaces and exchanges 
First of all I would like to give a definition of the two terms: all societies are defined by the geographical spaces they occupy and how they open up these spaces to what lies farther away. Through trade, conquest, emigration and communication, nations have always influenced others culturally, economically, politically or scientifically. 
In class we spoke about the frontier in the American culture and tried to answer the question “What makes American people always be on the go?” 
In a first part I’ll speak about the conquest of the American territory while, in a second part, I’ll talk about the expansion of the USA beyond the American territory

PARTIE 1/

The conquest of the American territory is the first part of the American expansion. The pioneer had to conquer the whole territory by fighting the Indians and the danger witch existing in the desert 
It is illustrated in the book “Danger Ahead” the scene takes place during the conquest where a group of pioneer have to end their conquest because of the seared and the Indians this history show the danger of the conquest
Moreover they speak about Indians they are seems like baddies in this history the relationships between them are conflictuel they are seems like enemies that's why they are at war 
The movie “Dances with wolves” give an other point of view on the relationship between the pioneer and the Indians in this history a first lieutenant fraternizes with a tribe of Indians later he will finish to join this tribe, he even fell in love with an Indian.
With these two example we have seen the relationship between Indians and pioneer they are most of the time conflictual but we have seen an other example where Indians are seems like goodies not like enemies moreover we have seen the beginning of the American expansion 

PARTIE 2/ 

Once American conquered the whole territory they didn’t stop to be on the go, they pushed the limit of their expansion beyond the American frontier. For example after the WW2 they help lots of country to rebuild with the Marshall Plan they want the peace in the world according to Gordon Sinclair USA want to help and have a good relationship with other country “Champion of peace” he said, but other nation don't help USA don't really want to have a good relationship with them. Gordon Sinclair thinks that other land have to help USA and be proud of them moreover it's important to have a good relationship with USA to ensure the peace in the world 
USA have an other goal, according to JFK they had to conquest the space for peace because with this conquest they were able to colaborate with other country for a really important goal for humanity moreover that showed the power of USA and allowed them to expand America 
These two example shows the willigness of USA to create the peace in the world to expand their country beyond their frontier and the frontier of the earth

Thanks to these example we have seen that USA have expand their country first by conquering America and after by helping other contry moreover they expand their country beyond earth they have got bad relation with Indians but want the peace in the world after that 

[Jean B]

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Bonjour,

Quelqu'un peut-il m'aider à corriger ma notion car je pense avoir fait beaucoup de fautes ? Je passe à l'oral dans 1 semaine. Merci de votre aide. 

INTRO/

I’m going to talk about the notion of spaces and exchanges. 
First of all I would like to give a definition of the two terms: all societies are defined by the geographical spaces they occupy and how they open up these spaces to what lies farther away. Through trade, conquest, emigration and communication, nations have always influenced others culturally, economically, politically or scientifically. 
In class we spoke about the frontier in the American culture and tried to answer the question “What makes American people always be on the go?” 
In a first part I’ll speak about the conquest of the American territory while, in a second part, I’ll talk about the expansion of the USA beyond the American territory.

PARTIE 1/

The conquest of the American territory is the first part of the American expansion. The pioneer had to conquer the whole territory by fighting the Indians and the danger witch <Ça, c’est la sorcière !> that <(en raison de l’antécédent mixte personne + chose) existinged in the desert. <Serais-tu fâché avec le point final ? Le point final matérialisant une pause, si tu ne les écris pas, tu cours le risque de t’essouffler !
It is illustrated in the book “Danger Ahead” the scene takes place during the conquest where a group of pioneers have to end their conquest because of the seared and the Indians < ???  Moi pas comprendre !  this history shows the danger of the conquest. <L’absence du -s final, prononcé “z” ici, sera remarquée aussi bien qu’à l’écrit.
Moreover they speak about Indians they are seems < Il t’arrive de te relire ? > seen like baddies in this history the relationships between them are conflictuel <Tu n’as donc aucun dictionnaire ?> conflicting they are seems <rebelote ! x like enemies that's why they are at war.
The movie “Dances with wolves” gives <encore ! another point of view on the relationship between the pioneer and the Indians in this history a first lieutenant fraternizes with a tribe of Indians later he will finish to end up joining this tribe, he will even fall in love with an Indian. <Ne mélange pas les temps.
With these two examples <2 = pluriel ! we have seen the relationship between Indians and pioneers they are most of the time conflictual x <voir plus haut but we have seen another example where Indians are seems x <voir plus haut itou like goodies not like enemies moreover we have seen the beginning of the American expansion. 

PARTIE 2/ 

Once the Americans had conquered<antériorité dans le passé = pluperfect, exactement comme le plus-que-parfait français the whole territory they didn’t stop to be on the go, they pushed the limit of their expansion beyond the American frontier. For example after the WW2 they helped lots of countries to rebuild with the Marshall Plan. Nouvelle phrase, sinon tu vas t’asphyxier !> They wanted the peace in the world according to Gordon Sinclair the USA wanted to help and have a good relationship with other countries, be the “Champion of peace” he said, but other nations didn't help the USA, didn't really want to have a good relationship with them. Gordon Sinclair thinks thought that other lands had to help the USA and be proud of them. <Sauf erreur, tu es dans le récit d’évènements passés, terminés = preterit Nouvelle phrase encore> Moreover it's important to have a good relationship with the USA to ensure the peace in the world. <Tu as intérêt à bûcher les règles d’emploi/omission de “the” afin de les maîtriser car à l’écrit, ça ne pardonne pas. Tu trouveras un lien en bas de page.
The USA have another <S’écrit en 1 seul mot, au cas où tu ne l’aurais pas remarqué goal, according to JFK they had to conquer the space for peace because with this conquest they were able to collaborate with other countries for a really important goal for humanity. Moreover that showed the power of the USA and allowed them to expand America 
These two examples shows <Le sujet est pluriel, pas de -s final ! the willigness of the USA to create the peace in the world to expand their country beyond their frontier and the frontier of the earth

Thanks to these example we have seen that the USA have expanded their country first by conquering America and after by helping other countries.  Moreover they expanded their country beyond the earth <Là, va falloir m’expliquer comment ils s’y sont pris ! Ferais-tu de la science fiction sans le savoir ? they have got bad relationship with the Indians but want the peace in the world after that.

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[Nightwing]

Merci beaucoup JRB