Correction d'un devoir

[Cam0640]

Bonjour, j'ai récemment réalisé une présentation de texte sur le texte " Harassed ". j'aurais grandement besoin de votre aide pour corriger les potentiels fautes de tournures. Merci d'avance pour votre aide !

 

This text is an extract of a novel entitled " Enduring Love ". It was written by Ian McEwan and published in 1997. This text raises the issue of whether we have the right to force our believe upon someone.
We are witness of a phone call between the narrator and a policeman.The narrator tries to explain to the policeman the reason of his call while the policeman doesn't stop asking him the aim of his call. According to the officer who ticks some established of a list,the purpose of the narrator's call is not receivable. The woman ends up conversation by saying that responsibility of the police in this particular case is not engaged. However,it's possible that the author examines a character's paranoia and obsession that lead to madness.
To conclude,this part highlights a modern theme of our society which is the harassment.
At the present time,everyone can be harassed anywhere at work or on the street. In France,the sexism is very frequent since the strong feminization of employment in the second half of the 20th century. Similarly for xenophobia with the rise of the extreme right.

 

Here is the text

[Jean B]

Bonjour, bienvenue sur le forum d'anglais.

This text is an extract of from a novel entitled "Enduring Love". It was written by Ian McEwan and published in 1997. This text raises the issue of whether we have the right to force our believe belief upon someone. < believe = verbe <===> belief = nom
We are the witnesses < accord avec le sujet au pluriel of a phone call between the narrator and a policeman. The narrator tries to explain to the policeman the reason of his call while the policeman / doesn't stop / keeps on / asking him the aim of his call. According to the officer who ticks some established xxx of a list, the purpose of the narrator's call is not receivable. The woman ends up the conversation by saying that the responsibility of the police in this particular case is not engaged. However, it's possible that the author examines a character's paranoia and obsession that lead to madness.
To conclude, this part highlights a modern theme of our society which is the harassment. < Révise les règles d’emploi/omission du déterminant “the”, ce ne sera pas superflu. Voir lien en pj.
At the present time, everyone can be harassed anywhere at work or on the street. In France, the sexism is has been very frequent since the strong feminization of employment in the second half of the 20th century. Similarly for xenophobia with the rise of the extreme right.< cas typique de l’emploi du present perfect puisqu’il y a un lien évident passé/présent. Révise cela aussi, c’est primordial au bac.

Note que je n’ai pas lu le texte qui est difficilement lisible. Quand tu scannes un document, il faut absolument qu’il soit bien à plat sur la vitre.

Bonne continuation.

THE.doc

[Cam0640]

Merci beaucoup

Pour witness, je pensais l'employer comme un verbe.

Ce verbe n'existe pas ?

[Jean B]

il y a une heure, Mrevol a dit :

Merci beaucoup

Pour witness, je pensais l'employer comme un verbe. Dans ce cas, il t'aurait fallu supprimer le "are" parasite. Est-ce qu'en français "Nous sommes témoigner" est correct ? Que nenni, mon jeune ami ! Quelle horreur !

> We witness a phone call between...

Ce verbe n'existe pas ? Il existe, bien sûr ! Ton erreur provient du fait que la graphie "witness" est la même à la fois pour le verbe et le nom. Quand tu doutes, ouvre ton dictionnaire.

 

[Cam0640]

Merci beaucoup en tous cas!

Je prends note des points à réviser.

Bonne soirée JRB.

[Jean B]

You're welcome!