Logbook 6

[Laurine.V]

Hello! 

I'm studying English at univesity and I have to write a logbook of many presentations (it's the last one!!! ). I do that but I'd like someone with a good English level to correct my work. 

I think that there are some tense and grammar mistakes. Furthermore, the logbook has to be written with a formal academic writing, I don't know if my work is correct for that.

Thank you in advance.

 

 

Here is my work: 

• The first:

Summary:

            Members of this group talked about neuropsychology. More precisely, they talked about the field of memory. After presenting neuropsychological tests, the HM patient’s case was proposed to us. Thanks to this, they were able to able to explain the different forms of memory. At the end of the presentation, students passed a test on working memory.

Explanation:

            There are two main types of memory: short-term in which working memory is stored and long-term memory. The latter can be explicit or implicit. Broca was the first to make the link between brain and language. 

Conclusion:

            In conclusion, notions presented were interesting. However, the pace was quite brisk, the presentation was difficult to understand. More interaction with students may have allowed for better understanding. Overall, it was a very extensive presentation.

 

• The second:

Summary:

            Lea, Farah and Marion talked about street harassment. They began by showing a short video. From there, they asked the students to find out the subject of the presentation. A test was also done to find out how many people in the classroom were already victims of street harassment. Another video was also shown during the presentation. In this one we see a girl walking down the street wearing a t-shirt and black jeans.

 

Explanation:

            Most woman and girls have the experience of street harassment. It can be honking or sexually explicit comments for example. Harassment results in particular from objectification. This concept brings the idea that woman is considered as an object.

 

Conclusion:

            It was very interesting to link a current phenomenon with psychology. This presentation was very interactive and easy to understand. Maybe more concepts from psychology should have been included.

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Here is my work: 

• The first:

Summary:

            Members of this group talked about neuropsychology. More precisely, they talked about the field of memory. After presenting neuropsychological tests, the HM patient’s case was proposed to us. Thanks to this, they were able to able to explain the various/different forms of memory. At the end of the presentation, students passed a test on working memory.

Explanation:

            There are two main types of memory: a short-term one in which the working memory is stored and a long-term one/ memory. The latter can be explicit or implicit. Broca was the first to make the link between brain and language. 

Conclusion:

            In conclusion, notions presented were interesting. However, the pace was quite brisk, the presentation was difficult to understand. More interaction with students may have allowed for a better understanding. Overall, it was a very extensive presentation.

 

• The second:

Summary:

            Lea, Farah and Marion talked about street harassment. They began by showing a short video. From there then on, < = À partir de ce moment-là  they asked the students to find out the subject of the presentation. A test was also done to find out how many people in the classroom were already the victims of street harassment. Another video was also shown during the presentation. In this one we could see a girl walking down the street wearing a t-shirt and black jeans.

 

Explanation:

            Most women < pluriel irrégulier and girls have the experience of street harassment. It can be honking or sexually explicit comments for example. Harassment results in particular from objectification. This concept brings the idea that a woman is looked upon as/regarded as/considered as to be/ an object.

 

Conclusion:

            It was very interesting to link a current phenomenon with psychology. This presentation was very interactive and easy to understand. Maybe more concepts from psychology should have been included.