Logbook 3

[Laurine.V]

Hello! 

I'm studying English at univesity and I have to write a logbook of many presentations. I do that but I'd like someone with a good English level to correct my work. 

I think that there are some tense and grammar mistakes. Furthermore, the logbook has to be written with a formal academic writing, I don't know if my work is correct for that.

Thank you in advance.

 

 

Here is my work : 

Summary:

Clémentine, Marion, Elsa and Oscar talked about social psychology. More precisely, they talked about conformity.

Their presentation began with a crossword puzzle in which we had to find the key words of their subject. During their course, Oscar repeatedly clapped his hands. A small group of students had been informed of this and also had to clap their hands. The aim of this experiment was to see if non-accomplice students would conform.

Moreover, a video was shown to the class. This one presented a social experiment made recently in the USA.

 

Explanation:

There are two types of conformity: public conformity and private conformity. Private conformity takes place when a person changes his point of view and adheres to it. Conversely, public conformity appears when a person changes his point of view and he does not adhere to this one.

 

Conclusion:

To conclude, the hand clapping experience was very interesting! Maybe they could have made a little bit more slides in their slideshow. In fact, sometimes they talked fast and it was difficult to understand.

 

[Jean B]

Hi,

Summary:

Clémentine, Marion, Elsa and Oscar talked about social psychology. More precisely, they talked about conformity.

Their presentation began with a crossword puzzle in which we had to find the key words of their subject. During their course, Oscar repeatedly clapped his hands. A small group of students had been informed of this and also had to clap their hands. The aim of this experiment was to see if non-accomplice students would conform.

Moreover, a video was shown to the class. This one It presented a social experiment made recently in the USA.

 Explanation:

There are two types of conformity: < 2 = pluriel public conformity and private conformity. Private conformity takes place when a person changes his/her point of view and adheres to it. Conversely, public conformity appears when a person changes his/her point of view and he does not adhere to this one it. < Bien que person soit du singulier, le nom s'applique au deux sexes ; de ce fait,  l'adjectif possessif pluriel their peut remplacer les his/her. Cela peut paraître difficile à admettre grammaticalement pour nous francophones mais c'est amplement usité chez les anglophones. L'anglais est une langue pragmatique.

 Conclusion:

To conclude, the hand clapping experience was very interesting! Maybe they could have made added a little bit some more slides in their slideshow. In fact, sometimes they talked fast and it was difficult to understand.