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[BenTS]

Bonjour voila ma synthèse en anglais mon niveau n'est pas très élevés je voudrais bien une correction de ma synthèse merci.

ps merci de me dire ce que vous en pensez et si je dois enlever certaines choses ou les réajuster

T'es un petit malin, toi ! Tu aurais dû écrire "synthèses" au pluriel !

The notion I will deal with is "Spaces and exchanges".
To illustrate this notion, I chose to talk about immigration to the Unites States.
Immigration has always been a topical subject and has enabled many countries to get rich and it still allows it, but it may have its limitations.
We will ask the question Is the USA the right destination to achieve one's dream?
In order to answer this question we will see in a first one the reasons which prompted the Mexicans of their country in a second time the difficulties that the Mexicans encounter on the spot and finally we will see if the Mexicans

 

The notion I will deal with is "Spaces and exchanges".

To illustrate this notion, I chose to talk about immigration to the Unites States.

Immigration has always been a topical subject and has enabled many countries to get rich and it still allows it, but it may have its limitations.

 

We will ask the question Is the USA the right destination to archieve one's dream ?

In order to answer this question we will see in a first one the reasons which prompted the Mexicans of their country in a second time the difficulties that the Mexicans encounter on the spot and finally we will see if the Mexicans who migrate to the united states Come to realize their American dream.

 

The border between the United States and Mexico has always been a topical probem it has always been questioned This border and one of the busiest in the world this border has become a strategic place of much trade Takes place down but also takes place of many traffics for example like the drug trafficking as we were able to see in the document The wall this rubber is very watched by the police of the detectors of movement, cameras this border makes thousands of Kilometers and it is bounded by some places by fences some manifestations take place before its borders as we were able to see it with a phothography with American some who clearly oppose this immigration.

Mexico is a poor country where unemployment is very high whereas the United States seem to be the first world power made dream of many Mexicans, the United States would be the solution to all their problems.

 

Mexicans as Anna, Nora dream of a better life with a better standard of living better working conditions a higher salary that is why many Mexicans cross the border because the United States is for them an opppunity to change Life, the world of work opens up to them is the American dream but the problem is really achievable. Any Mexican who migrates to the United States wants to realize the American dream, as shown in my Bruce Springsteen song "American land" where he tells without the first part the wonderful things of this country with the money flowing, the Diamonds that he only has to pick up on the sidewalks that this dream is possible if one is a hard working person he dreams of a house for his family of a beautiful environment for his wife and children. The first part song makes the United States a sort of paradise for all migrants of the world

This immigration divides the American population into two parts because, initially, this immigration makes it possible to evolve the United States because it is cheap labor is a golden opportunity for companies but in Secondly it removes many jobs and puts into difficulty many Americans who become unemployed

A part of the US economy appears to be based on this unskilled workforce.

Many Mexicans cross the border either legally as we saw with Marisol or illegal as Anna did in passing through pipes and crossing the Arizona dessert she took the risk of losing her life.

Passing this border illegally at a non negligible cost must first pay a ferryman and succeed in surviving during the crossing before arriving on American so.

 

Getting down the Mexicans are treated like a cheap labor they work in conditions as difficult as those of Mexico with very low wages as shown in the document The Economis Nora being an immigrant she lives in a kind of Park in very difficult conditions it earns very little money despite the help of some associations.

Nora may be in trouble but her children are born in the United States so thanks to the right they are American Nora remains an undocumented Mexican immigrant she may be at any time send back to Mexico but her children will remain she can be at Her children a better future

 

It is perhaps his American dream that his children succeed.

Other immigrants succeed in realizing their dream as we have seen in Barak Obama's speech where he congratulates José presumably a Mexican who had left from a distance at first he picked up the beets in the fields but thanks to his perseverance he made Medical imaging studies and succeeded in realizing his dream of becoming an astronaut, the president congratulates him it is a pride it is also thanks to people some Jose that the American dream persists and leaves to the Mexicans a glimmer of hope.

In another document we were able to see immigration from another angle, as for example with Marisol or she proclaims her dual identity and she is proud of the beautiful mixture of her two cultures is for her a very enriching experience.

 

To conclude as we have seen immigration has always existed it has positive effects as negative opinions divregent it is successful for some but not for others.

This year Mexican immigration is still topical as we were able to see with the presidentials. Barack Obama openly supported this migration that allowed the country to get rich but his predecessor is not of the same opinion as we were able to hear it Coptic dismiss all illegal Mexicans and build a wall all along the border.

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I’m going to present the notion myths and heroes. I will define the two terms of this notion, the word "heroes" and the word "myths”.

A myth is a story that may or may not be true. These stories have great symbolic power. A hero is a courageous, confident, who fights a cause, rights

In the USA yhe Civil Rights movement against segregation had such an impact on national opinion that the Civil Rights Act was voted by the US Congress in 1964

At the time iconic figures emerged such as Martin Luher King the leader of the movement or Rosa Parks and their victory made it possible for African Americans to gain recognition.

So when Barack Obama became President of the USA in 2008, people throught the time had come at last for a post racial America where discriminatios and prjudices xould disappear for good.

One can then ask the question was such a vision realistic ?

In order to answer this problem, we will first see the history of racial segregation with its many heroes and in a second time we will see that the injustices persist for the majority of African Americans

 

The hero be somebody as who wants change the History as a defender of common values. For example, in spite of the abolition of slavery by Abraham Lincoln, discrimination against the Blacks between 1865 and 1965 was shameful and shocking.Black people or African Americans, were victims of slavery, racial discrimination, racial segregation.. They were treated as inferiors by most of the White people. It was the time of the Jim Crow Laws. These laws forbidded to Black to be by Whites side at the school, bus, restaurant, . A black man and a white women were not authorized to married and have children.

So many people fighted for freedom and equalities between Black and Whites like Rosa Parks, who said “no” to this laws or Martin Luther King, with his famous speech “I have a dream” who incited to keep hopeHe wished equality between black and white people, but also justice and freedom. He hoped that "one day "little black boys and little black girls will be able to join hands with little white boys and white girls as sisters and brothers , and many others.

Thank to determined and tough people such as Martin Luther King, the blacks achieved the abolition of the Jim Craw Laws and got Civic Rights even if the racism is also present.

 

Despite a considerable change of laws, discrimination and racism towards the blacks and still present other personalities continue the fight of martin luther king as Michelle Obama.

 

As we have seen in the text "The Wichita Eagle" Michelle Obama is also very involved in this cause she wants to move things and wants the mentalities to change

First lady Michelle Obama addressed graduating students from the Topeka school district.

She celebrate the landmark case’s anniversary which outlawed segregation in public schools. She told the students to look around the arena and see the mix of races, cultures and faiths in the audience.

The video "htag23ways to killed" is a compaign led by alicia adressed to Barack Obama and his governement.

 

It is not only the celebrities who make their voices heard from the unknown Afro-Americans make their discontent heard as we saw in the video "htag Blackslives matter", in this video we speak of a national movement that takes The organization is made up of African Americans of several generations, they do this by singing gospel, this movement has no leader, it is a movement of the people .

 

Obama's election and reelection could lead to the belief that the color of the skin is no longer a problem however But as we have seen in the text "Family of Florida boy killed by Neighborhood Watch" discrimination in the Usa is a problem that is still far from being solved.

A 17-year-old African-American boy killed by his blockade community in Florida by a captain of the White Quarter Voice.

The video "htag23ways to killed" shows the different supports that Afro Americans have, they want to make things happen, many celibates are in this video mostly black people but we can also see people.

Each celebrity presents a victim with his first name and photo.

Politice violence against Afro-Americans continues to develop in the USA, they often make the front page , they become almost annodine, they are very regular, the police are most of the time presumed innocent. These proceedings while most of the time the victims do not even have weapons on them and they are direct abnatus like this young man, his family is afraid that the murderer is not condemned what happens very often.

 

However there are some African Americans who happen to succeed in life as Ophra ,as can be seen in the text " A successful" Oprah has become one of the twentieth century’s most influential people in America .

She overcame the obstacles of being an African American.

she is now present in all areas of the media. T her television channel. These outlets are all tools to broadcast her principles which inadvertently influence America.

She is an example to follow for many African Americans.

she represents the achievement for African Americans.

 

To conclude, we have seen that the United States is far from a post-racial America there is still much to do, however, we can say that there are certain positive developments, the situation is not likely to be Political of Donald Trump

 

 

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

The notion I will I'm going to deal with is "Spaces and exchanges". << présent be going to + bv quand la décision est déjà prise.
To illustrate this notion, I chose to talk about immigration to the Unites States.
Immigration has always been a topical subject and has enabled many countries to get rich and it still allows it, but it may have its limitations.
We will ask the question Is the USA the right destination to achieve one's dream?
In order to answer this question we will see in a first one the reasons which prompted the Mexicans of to leave their country, in a second time then the difficulties that the Mexicans they encounter on the spot and finally we will see if the Mexicans who migrate to the united States come to realize succeed in making their American dream come true.

The border between the United States and Mexico has always been a topical problem, it has always been questioned. This border and is one of the busiest in the world this border and has become a strategic place of for much trade Takes place down but also takes place of many traffics for example like the such as drug traffick(ing) as we were able to could see in the document "The wall". Nouvelle phrase>> This rubber border << Je suppose is very watched very closely by the police of the who use motion detectors of movement and cameras. Nouvelle phrase >>  This border makes is thousands of kilometers long and it is bounded by fenced in some places by fences some manifestations where some demonstrations take place before its borders as we were able to could see it with from a photography with some Americans some who clearly oppose this immigration. << Ouf ! Comme de bien entendu, tu as écrit tout ce laïus d'abord en français pour le "traduire" ensuite ! Quelle perte de temps et surtout quelle sottise !

Mexico is a poor country where unemployment is very high whereas the United States seems to be the first world power made dream of that makes many Mexicans dream of success, the United States would be the solution to all their problems.

 

Mexicans as like Anna, Nora dream of a better life with a better standard of living, better working conditions, a higher salary that is why many Mexicans cross the border because the United States is for them an opppunity to change their lives. Nouvelle phrase. Pas plus que le français, l'anglais ne s'écrit pas "au kilomètre" >> The world of work opens up to them, it is their American dream but the problem is really achievable. Any Mexican who migrates to the United States wants to realize the make their American dream come true as shown in my Bruce Springsteen song "American land" where he tells within the first part the wonderful things of this country with the money flowing, the diamonds that he only has to pick up on the sidewalks, that this dream is possible if one is a hard working person, he dreams of a house for his family, of a beautiful environment for his wife and children. The first part of the song makes the United States a sort of paradise for all migrants of the world

This immigration divides the American population into two parts because initially this immigration makes it possible to evolve the United States because it is cheap labor is a golden opportunity for companies but in Secondly it removes many jobs and puts into difficulty many Americans who become unemployed << Bon là désolé, trop c'est trop, j'abandonne, "fatigué je suis" comme disait Yoda !

Reprends ton laïus et fais l'effort de dire les choses simplement, en pensant anglais, syntaxe anglaise, grammaire anglaise, vocabulaire anglais et construction anglaise et pas à partir de ton baratin français qui souvent n'a ni queue ni tête. Applique-toi à construire des phrases simples et non, comme tu le fais, des phrases à rallonge qui pour la plupart pêchent par manque de connecteurs logiques et finissent par ne plus rien signifier.

Comme je crains fort que le second texte soit du même acabit, ce sera sans moi.

Dernier conseil : un oral ne consistant pas à lire ni réciter un texte préalablement appris par coeur, prépare-toi à être interrompu, à répondre à des questions, des demandes de précisions, etc.

Vocabulaire : to realize sth = se rendre compte de qqch <<vs>> réaliser qqch = to achieve/fulfil/make/carry out something Ex. Il a réalisé/accompli son rêve = He made his dream come true.

A part of the US economy appears to be based on this unskilled workforce.

Many Mexicans cross the border either legally as we saw with Marisol or illegal as Anna did in passing through pipes and crossing the Arizona dessert she took the risk of losing her life.

Passing this border illegally at a non negligible cost must first pay a ferryman and succeed in surviving during the crossing before arriving on American so.

 

Getting down the Mexicans are treated like a cheap labor they work in conditions as difficult as those of Mexico with very low wages as shown in the document The Economis Nora being an immigrant she lives in a kind of Park in very difficult conditions it earns very little money despite the help of some associations.

Nora may be in trouble but her children are born in the United States so thanks to the right they are American Nora remains an undocumented Mexican immigrant she may be at any time send back to Mexico but her children will remain she can be at Her children a better future

 

It is perhaps his American dream that his children succeed.

Other immigrants succeed in realizing their dream as we have seen in Barak Obama's speech where he congratulates José presumably a Mexican who had left from a distance at first he picked up the beets in the fields but thanks to his perseverance he made Medical imaging studies and succeeded in realizing his dream of becoming an astronaut, the president congratulates him it is a pride it is also thanks to people some Jose that the American dream persists and leaves to the Mexicans a glimmer of hope.

In another document we were able to see immigration from another angle, as for example with Marisol or she proclaims her dual identity and she is proud of the beautiful mixture of her two cultures is for her a very enriching experience.

 

To conclude as we have seen immigration has always existed it has positive effects as negative opinions divregent it is successful for some but not for others.

This year Mexican immigration is still topical as we were able to see with the presidentials. Barack Obama openly supported this migration that allowed the country to get rich but his predecessor is not of the same opinion as we were able to hear it Coptic dismiss all illegal Mexicans and build a wall all along the border.

[BenTS]

Ok merci beaucoup pour les conseils je vais les apiquer merci d'avoir pris le temps de me répondre