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[lamina07]

Bonjour j'ai un exposé à faire en anglais: Nous sommes une agence de voyage et nous devons présenter un voyage organisé de 3 jours à New York. Je voudrais savoir si mon texte est correcte:

We are going to show you a fantastic program of three days to visit essentials touristic attractions in New York.

This travel will be very original because it will mix famous monument, place of memory, religion custom, celebrates sports centers…

You will be very cheerful by this destination

And big surprise your first day begin by an amazing activity…

and then, here we go!

When you arrive at the airport “LaGuardia”, a special taxi of the agency will take you at your first activity. You know this city is beautiful but you will not imagine how she is lovely of sky view. With Liberty Helicopters, you will live surprising experience.

Oh it’s great but what will we see from the helicopter?

I think it’s the moment to discover New-York in globality and discover his big monuments like the Statue of Liberty, the Boston Bridge, and the most recognized garden of New-York, the Central Park.

Ok Im sure it’s fantastic and after?

We are going to contemplate the most panoramic view of NY. It’s situated at the top of the Rockefeller center.

And then, where do we go?

New york is a city with an history very christian. For them the masses are very enjoye and happy. Especially thanks to the gospel songs that are known in the world if you don’t know this songs here is an extract. We invite you to share one of these masses in the most famous church of NY, the Abyssinian Baptist Church.

You all know this cap that is now an aesthetic accessory. But you know the really origine of this cap ? for the new yorkers this cap is not just an aesthetic accessory. This cap is the symbol for support her Baseball team, the Yankees. This team is the best team in the history of the baseball, is the most famous team in the world. This team play in the Yankee Stadium. We propose you to live your last night in NY in this big and crazy ambiance in this tribunes.

 

 

voila merci d'avance de vos reponses

 

[Jean B]

 

Bonsoir,

Il y a 19 heures, lamina07 a dit :

Bonjour j'ai un exposé à faire en anglais: Nous sommes une agence de voyage et nous devons présenter un voyage organisé de 3 jours à New York. Je voudrais savoir si mon texte est correcte: << "Texte" est un nom masculin.

We are going to show you a fantastic program of three days to visit essentials  touristic attractions in New York. << Adjectif = INVARIABLE, ça commence fort !

This travel will be very original because it will mix famous monuments, places of memory, religion customs, celebrates famous sports centers… << N'as-tu pas un dictionnaire ?

You will be very cheerful by about this destination

And big surprise your first day will begin by with an amazing activity…

and then, here we go!

When you arrive at the airport “LaGuardia” airport, a special taxi of the agency will take you at to your first activity. You know this city is beautiful but you will not imagine how she  it is lovely of from sky view. With Liberty Helicopters, you will live a surprising experience. << Il y a 3 pronoms sujet de la 3ème personne du singulier et aucun des 3 ne s'emploie au pif.

Oh it’s great but what will we see from the helicopter?

I think it’s the moment to discover New-York in globality and discover his  its big great monuments like the Statue of Liberty, the Boston Bridge, and the most recognized garden of New-York, the Central Park. << Idem pour les 3 adjectifs possessifs qui s'accordent en genre avec le possesseur. Révise tes connaissances de grammaire !

Ok Im sure it’s fantastic and after?

We are going to contemplate the most panoramic view of NY. It’s situated at the top of the Rockefeller center.

And then, where do we go?

New york is a city with an history  a very christian history. << L'adjectif épithète DEVANT le nom, tu l'as appris en sixième ! For them << Pour qui donc ? Mystère !   the masses are very enjoye full of joy and happiness.  Especially thanks to the gospel songs that are known in the world if you don’t know this these songs here is an extract. << this + nom singulier >> these + nom pluriel We invite you to share one of these masses in the most famous church of NY, the Abyssinian Baptist Church.

You all know this cap that is now an aesthetic accessory. But do you know the really origine of this cap ? for the New Yorkers this cap is not just an aesthetic accessory. This cap is the symbol for support her<< Encore ! Baseball team, the Yankees. This team is the best team in the history of the baseball, is the most famous team in the world. This team play in the Yankee Stadium. We propose you to live your last night in NY in this big and crazy ambiance atmosphere  in this tribunes the stands.

voila merci d'avance de vos reponses

 Déjà trop de lacunes sur des points de grammaire élémentaire. Révise les sans plus tarder, il faut les maîtriser.