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Micka82

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Hello there ! 

I don't know if that's the right place for this kind of matter, but I guess it changes from what you guys are used to on this board. :-P

I actually wrote a song and basically, I'd like to know whether it's grammatically correct or not.

Here's the masterpiece: (hum hum, I'm joking obviously, that's pretty lightweight but my very first song in English, so... don't get hung up on its depth :D )

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Tell me the world is not what I see
Tell me I’m good enough to live
Tell me your heart’s still beating for me
Tell me I’m wrong but please forgive


My sins, my song
My feelings are strong


Feel my heart and my soul shining through.
Feel my doubts and my fears around you.
I belong to you. (x2)

Tell me the sun warms the moon above us
Tell me there are still so many stars in the sky
Tell me the birds don’t fall when the rain is heavy
Tell me I’m wrong but please forgive

My sins, my song
My feelings are strong

Feel my heart and my soul shining through.
Feel my doubts and my fears around you.
I belong to you. (x2)

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Hoping I don't bother with my song,

Thanks in advance ! :) 
 

 

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Hi again, ;)

Good job, I really enjoyed reading your song. :) I think your English is good enough not to need any correction whatsoever.

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Oh, alright then, thank you JRB for the proofreading, and the compliment :D

Have a nice day :)

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