Résumé

[brown]

Bonsoir j'ai besoin  d'aide a rectifé mes eurre  sil vous plais merci 

Summary of the unfolding terrorist attacks that hit the United States on September 11, 2001 from the aircraft plane crashed into the towers of the world mall on the picture it had people jumping through the slots of the trips In flame has left The floors, on the image of the pentagon there was the turning that collapsed,

On of panic scene in the New York rush, the fireman was in the debris

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Comme je l'ai maintes fois écrit, je ne suis pas devin ! >>> Quel est l'énoncé du travail à faire ? Que dois-tu résumer, quel document ?

Apprends à composer des phrases courtes et à utiliser un minimum de connecteurs logiques, faute de quoi il est difficile de comprendre ce que tu as voulu exprimer.

À te lire...

[brown]

Notre prof nous a demander de faire une petite résumé sur sa . et ausside dire se que on c'est de notre connaissance et se que on nous avez en 3eme .

[Jean B]

Tu dois donc décrire la photo, situer l'évènement en synthétisant ce que tu en sais et ce qu'on t'a appris.

Sers-toi de la fiche suivante : / http://www.anglaisfacile.com/pages/mie/presenter-document-iconographique

Vocabulaire complémentaire :

au premier plan = in the foreground

au second plan = in the middle distance

à l'arrière plan = in the background

décombres / gravats = rubble

poussière = dust

[brown]

bonsoir 

Merci de bien vouloire de me rectifier 

• This document is a photo ,Explained to us how the authority was the day of the attack

It dates from 09_11_2001,It comes from the good life by jay Mcinerney

in the foreground i can see 3 police officer

1. in the middle distance i can see The policeman or rather the fireman who runs to the rubble ,And To their right there is a fire truck,

2. in the background there is world trade center who lapsed

3. in the background here is dust everywhere I see only near the height of the building

The United states his attack two planes crashed into the twin towers on sptember 11^th 2001

 

In the first aircraft he had 5 pirate from the look, the plane had to go to los Angeles but which crashed into the tower of the World delta center the first tower that was touched it was the north tower of the World tarde center at 8:46, Its facade is completely broken
Some midnight after the first building catches fire, a9h03 the second flight that crashes.He had people trapped on the 101st and 102nd floors and he had people who voluntarily plunged into the empty .9 h59 the tower of the world World tarde center vienne collapses in what second
10:28 North Tower that flows

[Jean B]

Sans vouloir t'offenser, ton anglais me désespère ! Malgré toute ma bonne volonté, j'ai du mal à toujours comprendre ce que tu as voulu dire. Mes corrections sont donc faites parfois "à l'estime".

Le 24/11/2016 at 16:15, brown a dit :

bonsoir

Merci de bien vouloire de me rectifier

• This document is a photo ,Explained to us how the authority was which was taken on the day of the attack.

It dates from 09.11.2001,It comes from the good life by Jay McInerney

In the foreground I can see 3 police officers. <<MAJUSCULE au premier mot d'une phrase // Le pronom sujet 1ère personne singulier doit s'écrire toujours avec un " I " MAJUSCULE ! // 3 = pluriel !

1. In the middle distance i can see The policemen or rather the firemen who runs to the rubble and to their right there is a fire truck. <<Ils sont plusieurs = verbe au pluriel, c'est-à-dire sans -s.

2. in the background there is the World Trade Center who which collapsed.

3. in the background there is dust everywhere I can only see near halfway up the height of the building.

The United States his was attacked by two planes that crashed into the twin towers on sptember 11^th 2001.

In the first aircraft he had 5 pirate from the look, the plane had to go to los Angeles but which crashed into the tower of the World delta center <<Incompréhensible The first tower that was touched hit it was the north tower of the World Trade Center at 8:46. Its facade is was completely broken.<<Il serait temps de mémoriser que le récit d'un évènement passé se fait au prétérit.
Some midnight time after the first building catches caught fire, a9h03 the second flight that plane crashed into the second tower. He had There were people trapped on the 101st and 102nd floors and he had some people who voluntarily plunged threw themselves out into the empty space. 9 h59 the tower of the world World tarde center vienne collapses in what second
10:28 North Tower that flows <<Incompréhensible

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