Correction - Discrimination

[thegeeksophie]

Bonjour à tous et à toute, 

je vous sollicite pour m'aider à corriger et améliorer mon devoir d'anglais dont le sujet est : vous avez été témoin d'une injustice (sexisme, racisme etc...) pendant votre stage d'observation en entreprise (stage de 3ème). Vous allez donc en parler à votre maître de stage via un e-mail.

 

Dear Mr Johnson,

 

I am contacting you to inform you that yesterday, I was a witness of sexism in our company.

 

In fact, yesterday, when I was storing the test tubes when Stan shouted in front of lab staff "No women can do these tasks without knocking over the test tubes" and "Woman only care about makeup, shopping and chatting". In my opinion, this speech is totaly scandalous and above all that every men who were present at this slanderous remarks laughed and approved. These reactions deeply affect me. The few women present in the room at that time did not manifest and simply lowered their heads. I'm afraid this is not the first time that such acts occur in this place. Holding such a speech in a company is totally inappropriate and outdated since a long time. I think it's time to end the show and finish this tour to end of such representation of women. I hope that these acts will not go unpunished. Also,  .I trust you for it. 

 

 

 

 

Yours sincerely,

 

 

 

 

Merci d'avance

[Jean B]

 

Bonjour,

Il y a 19 heures, thegeeksophie a dit :

Bonjour à tous et à toute, 

je vous sollicite pour m'aider à corriger et améliorer mon devoir d'anglais dont le sujet est : vous avez été témoin d'une injustice (sexisme, racisme etc...) pendant votre stage d'observation en entreprise (stage de 3ème). Vous allez donc en parler à votre maître de stage via un e-mail.

 

Dear Mr Johnson,

I am contacting you to inform you that yesterday, I was a witness of to / I witnessed  / an act of sexism in our company yesterday.

In fact, yesterday, when I was storing the test tubes when Stan shouted in front the face of the lab staff "No woman can do these tasks without knocking over the test tubes" and "Women only care about makeup, shopping and chatting". In my opinion, this speech is totally scandalous and above all the more so that every since all the men who were present at heard this these slanderous remarks laughed and approved. These reactions deeply affect me. The few women present in the room at that time did not manifest nothing /  did not react and simply lowered their heads. I'm afraid this is not the first time that such acts occur in this place. Holding such a speech in a company is totally inappropriate and has been outdated since for a long time. I think it's time to end the show and finish this tour to put an end end of to such representation of women. I hope that these acts will not go unpunished. Also, I trust you for seeing to it. 

Yours sincerely,

Merci d'avance

Pour une fois, je n'ai mis aucune explication de mes corrections. Si tu n'en comprends pas le sens, just feel free to ask.