Correction et amélioration de mon expression SVP

[FCKEFCKE73]

La consigne: You are presenting your next visit to the city as a tourist

                 You start by mentioning you experience of the city (present perfect) 

                   Then you explain about one place you will visit and one place ou won't visit and why justify your choices

to begin , i never been to nyc , because plane tickets are to expensive, for me new york is the biggest city in a world , go over there would be my dream.

When I go to new york , i will visit at Brooklyne Bridge , because It is the longest bridge of the world , this is one of the biggest structure of new york .He joins Manhattan and brooklyne , two districts which I would want to visit when I would go has New York . And not forgetting that the seen is amazing !For me it is the most know bridge and we see him often on US series. 

So , i will not go to Times square because it's to big , there's lot of peapols and I hate that , I see no purpose go to time square .

In more It is in the crowd that we have most likely running to Peak poket .

[FCKEFCKE73]

use : relative clauses , present perfect and will: won't 

j avais oublie de le préciser dans la consigne , merci de votre aide.

 

[Ezehkiel Jones]

Hello,

Citation

 

To begin, I have never been to NYC, because plane tickets are too expensive. for To me, New York (tu n'aimes pas les majuscules?) is the biggest city in a the world, to go over there would be my dream.

When I go to new york, I will visit at Brooklyne Bridge, because It is the longest bridge in the world (tu es sûre ? Le Golden Gate est pourtant 3 fois plus grand), this is one of the biggest structure of in New York. He It joins links/connects Manhattan and Brooklyn, two districts which I would want like to visit when I would go has go to New York, and not forgetting that the seen view is amazing! For To me, it is the most known bridge and we often see him it on US series. 

So, (tu marques un effet de conséquence, qui n'a pas lieu d'être il me semble) I will not go to Times Square because it's too big , there's there are a lot of peapols people and I hate that, I see no purpose go point in going to Times Square. (Tu es très radicale!)

In more addition, it is in the crowd that we have most likely running are more likely to fall prey to Peak poket Pickpockets.

 

Ouf ! Autant d'erreurs dans un petit texte ! Je sens que google translate n'a pas bien fait son travail.. En plus de fautes d'orthographe, syntaxe, fais attention au sens de ton propos. Il faut retravailler ça !