Oral d'anglais espaces et échanges

[Lilouchocolat]

Bonjour j'ai beaucoup de mal angalis serait il possibe que quelqu'un me corrige ? 

Spaces and exchanges

Our world is built on the exploration and conquest of new spaces.
An exchange is the act of  giving or receiving something in substitution for something else
Our modern-day world is changing quickly and seems to be a smaller place due to improvements in technology and communication. Information exchange has become easier thanks to the internet.  These different cultural, economic, sociological and language interactions have transformed and characterized our modern-day world – sometimes for better, sometimes for worse. So, what  extent has the world become a global village ?
To my mind, the documents that seems to best illustrate the notion is the speech of barack obama » helping the dreamers » , the document with an image on the pollution  then  an image « one nation under cctv « and a poster by Sephardi fairey

The globalization enable to people to be connected. an intellectual, speaks about « global village » to define our world.. Thanks to globalization some cities are most open and welcome people from the whole world. It’s question of global cities like Paris, Tokyo or London, which are multicultural. If I focus on The document   an extract of a speech from Barack Obama, the president of United States. This extract is called Helping the dreamers. It addresses the immigration policy of the nation. He mentioned the « dreamers », child of immigrants coming young in United States, who have made their studies, who play in the neighborhood and who have pledged allegiance to the flag. They are American in their heart and mind, but not officially. At the end of the extract, President Obama encouraged his audience to put themselves in the place of these young people facing deportation to a country they do not know and they do not know the language and culture. That’s why he wants to create « the dream act » law dreamers. As a conclusion, we can say that even if the immigration remains debated, it is indisputably a source of economic and cultural wealth for the USA.It  allows to put an end to borders.
Secondly . However globalization has limits. In the environment area : the pollution is everywhere so the biodiversity is damaged. This has an impact on the health of the inhabitants. effectively on a document we can see a Chinese on a bike with a mask because pollution is very high

One of the major development in the most recent years is the Internet and the different social networks like Facebook, Twitter or Skype. This is a new way to communicate today. These networks make it easier for us to stay in touch with friends and family abroad, they open up borders and enable us to communicate with people abroad.  but there are negative sides since the world and at present completely under control spaces do not belong to us as shown in the picture because on the wall it s write « one nation under cctv » wich reference to « one nation under god » this analogy between « god » and « cctv » is clear , the nation is no protected by god but by cctv cameras . Thus the world is reduced, which makes the instant exchanges   effectually in the poster of shepard faired . The dominant colors are black, red and yellow. We can see many elements of surveillance like cameras in the left hand corner, a helicopter, , birds, two men looking with binoculars, a control tower and the most important thing I think, the big eye looking carefully under the big caption :  » Big Brother is watching you  » . When we look for the first time at the poster we can guess that the atmosphere is stifling. All these elements put people ill at ease.

To conclude, we can consider that the globalization have a massive role in terms of exchange. Indeed, thanks to new tool such as internet, the knowledge and culture for example can be shared all around the world in a very short time. The actors of this globalization are the states, the government who allow or not the share and the different kind of exchange or the social network.. However, this phenomenon have some positive and negative impact. The North is favored due to its advanced development unlike the South.thus the world is totally under control and exchange spaces being reduced, everything is faster .we speak of global village .

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

il y a 53 minutes, Lilouchocolat a dit :

Bonjour j'ai beaucoup de mal x angalis serait-il possibe que quelqu'un me corrige ? 

Spaces and exchanges

Our world is built on the exploration and conquest of new spaces.
An exchange is the act of  giving or receiving something in substitution for something else.
Our modern-day world is changing quickly and seems to be a smaller place due to improvements in technology and communication. Information exchange has become easier thanks to the Internet.  These different various cultural, economic, sociological and language interactions have transformed and characterized our modern-day world – sometimes for better, sometimes for worse. So, to what  extent has the world become a global village?
To my mind, the documents that seems to best illustrate the notion is the speech of barack obama » helping the dreamers », the document with an image on the pollution  then  an image « one nation under cctv « and a poster by Sephardi fairey. < Même si tu as " beaucoup de mal en anglais ", j'ai du mal à croire que tu ignores l'usage des majuscules aux noms propres.

The globalization enables to people to be connected.< 1) Absence de déterminant devant un nom employé dans la généralité. 2) -s final au présent simple d'un verbe dont le sujet est singulier. Ce sont 2 notions élémentaires. An intellectual speaks about « global village » to define our world. Thanks to globalization some cities are most open and welcome people from the whole world. It’s question of global cities like Paris, Tokyo or London, which are multicultural. If I focus on the document an extract of from a speech from by Barack Obama, the president of the United States. <Pourquoi avoir commencé par une subordonnée d'hypothèse puisqu'elle n'est suivie d'aucune principale ? Tu ne te relis donc jamais ? This extract is called Helping the dreamers. It addresses the immigration policy of the nation. He mentioned the « dreamers », children of immigrants coming young in to the United States, who have made their studies, who play in the neighborhood and who have pledged allegiance to the flag. They are American in their heart and mind, but not officially. At the end of the extract, President Obama encouraged his audience to put themselves in the place of these young people facing deportation to a country they do not know and the language and culture of which they do not know. That’s why he wants to create « the dream act » law dreamers. As a conclusion, we can say that even if the immigration remains debated, it is indisputably a source of economic and cultural wealth for the USA. It  allows to put an end to borders.
Secondly however globalization has limits. In the environment area: the pollution is everywhere so the biodiversity is damaged. This has an impact on the health of the inhabitants. Effectively on a document we can see a Chinese on a bike with a mask because pollution is very high.

One of the major developments in the most recent years is the Internet and the different various social networks like Facebook, Twitter or Skype. This is a new way to communicate today. These networks make it easier for us to stay keep in touch with friends and family abroad, they open up borders and enable us to communicate with people abroad.  But there are negative sides since the world and at present completely under control spaces <??? do not belong to us as shown in the picture because on the wall it s write « one nation under cctv » is written on the wall, which reference refers to « one nation under God ». Nouvelle phrase> This analogy between « god » and « cctv » is clear, the nation is not protected by god but by cctv cameras. Thus the world is reduced, which makes the instant exchanges effectually in the poster of shepard faired. <??? The dominant colors are black, red and yellow. We can see many elements of surveillance like cameras in the left hand corner, a helicopter, birds, two men watching / looking with through binoculars, a control tower and the most important thing I think, the big eye looking carefully under the big caption:  » Big Brother is watching you  ». When we look for the first time at the poster we can guess that the atmosphere is stifling. All these elements put people ill at ease.

To conclude, we can consider that the globalization have  a massive role in terms of exchange. Indeed, thanks to new tool such as the Internet, the knowledge and culture for example can be shared all around the world in a very short time. The actors of this globalization are the states, the government who allow or not the share and the different various kinds of exchanges or the social network. However, this phenomenon have <encore ! some positive and negative impacts. The North is favored due to its advanced development unlike the South. Thus the world is totally under control and exchange spaces are being reduced, everything is faster, we speak of global village .

 

[Lilouchocolat]

Merci beaucoup et desolé pour les nombreuses fautes ma tablette ne fonctionne pas tres bien c'est galère  :/

[Jean B]

Ah cette tablette !