Découverte de nouveaux espaces

[ruedesetoiles]

Bonjour, 

 

Voici une petite dissertation en anglais. Pourriez-vous me corriger ? 

Merci d'avance

 

Many documentaries, books and media talk of riches discovered by some. Here we study three documents. We will try to address the problem: "How to discover new areas can change our view of the other?”  For this, we first see that discovery of new spaces means a homecoming or a quest about his origins. We will see that discovering new cultures and ways of life will enrich oneself and expand his way of seeing. Finally, we will show how the discovery can be exchanged in many respects.

 

Discovery of new areas means for many a homecoming. For some, it’s to live closer to nature in the wild and remote spaces. This is case regarding documents 1 and 2. In document 1, GrahamShonfield explains its mission on a reserve in northern Canada. This reserve is far from his province in a pretty wilderness. Similarly, in document 3, MikeRutherford struggle against cold and dangerous roads to the village at the top of the world in the Arctic Circle. Here, it’s therefore to discover distant parts of the world, and sometimes in extreme conditions. So, MikeRutherford, for example, says he had to arm themselves in order to deal with potential hungry polar bears. In addition, temperatures are extreme, bordering the night -50 ° C. However, for others, it’s for against a return to origins. Document 2 is a report on history of seven Inuit children who were removed from their families in the sixties, as part of an experiment. These seven adult children are returned to their original tribes to regain their past.

 

So, we see that the discovery of distant lands has different issues. But discovery of new spaces also to discover other cultures and other ways of living. These findings are also shared: ShonfieldGraham was able to expose his discovery of reserve with millions of other people through a documentary film. Similarly, documents 2 and 3 highlight these discoveries through the modern means of communication (Internet, video, media ...). Therefore, these findings enrich not only those who live, but also those with whom it’s shared.

 

 

In addition, these findings can not only learn about other cultures, but also to share with others and to take a different look at him. This exchange helps to improve ourselves as we broaden our way of seeing things. Therefore, it’s no longer limited to knowledge of our way of life, but we learn more about others, about their lives, their education, their culture. This expansion advocates aspects of tolerance and humility. Moreover, discovery of other cultures and ways of life still allows the exchange in another respect. Indeed, it allows realizing difficulties of others. For example, in Document 1, ShonfieldGraham admits that he’s surprised education system in the reserve, although it has improved, "the education system it's really, it's not the best, it's Improving". Thus, this discovery not only improvement in many respects.

 

Moreover, in these three documents, there is a constant exchange. This exchange is reflected in various forms: it’s volunteering for GrahamShonfield, since it provides administrative assistance and to improve the education system of the reserve. In document 3, Mike Rutherford proposed returning bring exotic foods to which Inuit have never tasted "I promis That if I ever return I'll bring supplies of fresh milk and vegetables - exotic and expensive luxuries That Some People in the village at the top of the world-have never tasted. "However, in Document 2, there’s more talk of a dramatic exchange for as Inuit were torn from their families and placed in English-speaking families. But now, they exchange their know-how in town with the expertise of Inuit reserves. However, these exchanges are difficult, "And really what he was getting at is that, they had certain skills that other Inuit didn’t have,”. ".

 

Through this presentation, we have attempted to answer problem: "How to discover new areas can change our view of the Other? ". For this, we initially showed that the discovery of new spaces means a homecoming for some, a search of their origins. We also demonstrated that discovering new cultures and ways of life will enrich oneself and expand his way of seeing. Finally, we have shown how the discovery can be exchanged in many respects.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

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Discovery of new areas means for many a homecoming. For some, it’s to live living closer to nature in the wild and remote spaces. This is the case regarding documents 1 and 2. In document 1, Graham Shonfield explains its  mission on a reserve in northern Canada. This reserve is far from his province in a pretty wilderness. Similarly, in document 3, Mike Rutherford struggles against cold and dangerous roads to the village at the top of the world in the Arctic Circle. Here, it’s therefore to discover distant parts of the world, and sometimes in extreme conditions. So, Mike Rutherford, for example, says he had to arm themselves  in order to deal with potential hungry polar bears. In addition, temperatures are extreme, bordering the night nearing -50 ° C at night. However, for to others, it’s for against < Faudrait savoir ! a return to origins. Document 2 is a report on history of seven Inuit children who were removed from their families in the sixties as part of an experiment. These seven adult children are returned to their original tribes to regain their past.

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Moreover, in these three documents, there is a constant exchange. This exchange is reflected in various forms: it’s volunteering for Graham Shonfield, since it provides administrative assistance and to improves the education system of the reserve. In document 3, Mike Rutherford proposed returning bring < ? exotic foods to which Inuit have never tasted "I promise that if I ever return I'll bring supplies of fresh milk and vegetables - exotic and expensive luxuries that some people in the village at the top of the world have never tasted. " However, in Document 2, there’s more talk of a dramatic exchange for as < ? Inuit were torn from their families and placed in English-speaking families. But now, they exchange their know-how in town with the expertise of Inuit reserves. However, these exchanges are difficult, "And really what he was getting at is that they had certain skills that other Inuit didn’t have,”. ".

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[ruedesetoiles]

Bonjour JRB, 

 

Tout d'abord merci pour ta correction. Oui, en effet, je fais Allemand en LV1 et j'ai malheureusement gardé l'habitude de mettre des majuscules aux noms propres, et ce même en Français !