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[sasam]

bonjour pouvez vous m'aidez a résumé ceci merci d'avance

More and more American teenagers are doing a job in the evenings and at weekends when they are not at school. Jim Hickey, 17, loves wearing nice clothes and buying CDs. He would also like to have a car of his own. Like many American teenagers who don't want to be totally dependent on their parents, Jim has a part-time job. He works 12 hours a week in a fast-food restaurant in Richmond, virginia, and earns $150 a month. Of course it's hard and Jim often falls asleep during history lessons. Many American teenagers of  16-19 like Jim work up to 17 hours a week in fast-food restaurants or shops. earning perhaps $200 a month. A recent survery discovered that only 30% of the working teenagers ever save any of the money they earn. Most of the teenagers spend all the money for them to spend on clothes, cars and going out to enjoy themselves. The majority of working teenagers are white, because the businesses which employ them are not usually in black or hispanic areas.

[sasam]

svp c'est pour une épreuve oral pour mon cap c'est urgent

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

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[sasam]

many teenagers 16 19 years work in week-end  to have pocket  money Approximately 12 hours To be able to buy clothes or even cars they want beings independent

merci penser vous que mon résumé est correcte ?

[Jean B]

Many American teenagers aged 16-19 years work approximately 12 hours in at weekends  to get/have pocket  money Approximately 12 hours To be able to so that they can buy clothes or even cars. <<< Construction revue. Nouvelle phrase>>> They want beings to be independent.

Merci. Penserz-vous que mon résumé est correcte ? Pose-toi la question : est-ce que quelqu'un n'ayant pas lu le texte saurait de quoi il y est question exactement ? C'est à ça que doit servir un résumé et tu as omis au moins 2 informations importantes. Est-ce que ce sont tous les ados américains qui travaillent le soir et le weekend ou certains d'entre eux ? Pourquoi ? Est-ce que tous économisent ?