Correction d'une traduction

[JulieH397]

Bonjour, je m'appelle Julie et j'ai besoin d'aide pour mon exposé d'anglais de niveau 1ère S. La grammaire, ce n'est pas mon fort, alors je vous laisse imaginer le nombre de fautes que contient ce texte ^^ 

Tourism is allows the tourists to discover new places and new populations.

 Places which they discover have a big cultural wealth. If they want to preserve the beauty of the places which they visit, tourists mustn't degrade them. For example, they shouldn't damage the old or sacred buildings, the ruins, which are very important monuments for the history or for the inhabitants. When the tourists visit places, or when they walk on paths, they can see panels of instruction but don't pay attention to it. For their safety, or for the safety of the others, or the safety of the site, they should read and follow them. It cost nothing, and it allows to keep the place safe.

Tourism is also based on the respect of natural resources of the site. Tourist and travel agencies thus to respect the botanical and animal species. For example, campers don't have to make a fire into forest when it's forbidden, walkers mustn't pick of protected flowers, and swimmers shouldn't let their waste on the beach. The rather worrisome current cases are first of the progressive destruction of the Great Barrier Reef. And then, there is the disappearance of a lot of animal species. For example, the social networks highlighted recently the case of the death of a baby dolphin killed by tourists who wanted to take photos with him. It's soo sad ... So tourists should be more respectful of the nature.

Tourism should also be a positive thing in the social standing, and thus to be respectful with the local populations. Tourists must respect them just as much as the place which they visit. For example, some populations have special faiths, traditions, which tourists have to keep. In class, we saw the example of a sacred place where people bathed for a movie. It offended the inhabitants, and some critics were emitted. We can also notice the fact that some people consider the aboriginals as animals. It is disrespectful, and so stupid ! 

To conclude, we can say that to protect some countries resources with the tourism, it's necessary to respect the nature, the cultural resources and the local populations. It's a responsible tourism, a sustainable tourism, if we take care of the economic needs of the country.

 

Voilà, merci d'avance et navrée pour les fautes, j'ai tenté de faire de mon mieux ... ;-)

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Le titre de ton sujet laisse entendre que tu as écrit ce texte d'abord en français pour le "traduire" ensuite en anglais. Comme je l'écris souvent sur ce forum, c'est la pire méthode qui soit. Les 2 langues ne fonctionnent selon les mêmes critères ni lexicaux, ni syntaxiques, ni grammaticaux. Il vaut donc beaucoup mieux écrire directement en anglais en t'aidant au besoin de ton dictionnaire et de ta grammaire tout en t'efforçant de penser aux structures de la phrase anglaise et surtout d'oublier le français. Le résultat, même entaché de fautes, sera toujours plus authentique qu'un texte "traduit" du français.

Bonjour, je m'appelle Julie et j'ai besoin d'aide pour mon exposé d'anglais de niveau 1ère S. La grammaire, ce n'est pas mon fort, alors je vous laisse imaginer le nombre de fautes que contient ce texte ^^ 

Tourism is allows the  tourists to discover new places and new populations.< Faute déjà signalée et expliquée précédemment et pourtant tu la commets à nouveau. À ton avis, à quoi donc doit servir une correction bien comprise ?

 Places which they discover have a big cultural wealth. If they want to preserve the beauty of the places which they visit, tourists mustn't degrade spoil them. For example, they shouldn't damage the  old or sacred buildings, the  ruins, which are very important monuments for the  history or for the  inhabitants. When the  tourists visit places, or when they walk on paths, they can see panels of instruction boards but don't pay attention to it them. < Le pronom doit être accordé en nombre avec le nom qu'il remplace, logique non ? For their safety, or for the safety of the  others, or the safety of the site, they should read and follow them. It costs nothing, and it allows to keep the place safe.< -s final au présent simple d'un verbe dont le sujet est singulier. Tu l'as appris en sixième !

Tourism is also based on the respect of natural resources of the sites. <Je n'ose imaginer les conséquences désastreuses que pourrait causer le tourisme sur un seul et unique site ! Tourist and travel agencies thus to must respect the  botanical and animal species. For example, campers don't have to make a fire into forests when it's forbidden, walkers mustn't pick of protected flowers and swimmers shouldn't let their waste on the beaches, which is a rather worrisome current case and the first cause of the progressive destruction of the Great Barrier Reef. And then, there is the disappearance of a lot of animal species. For example, the  social networks recently highlighted the case of the death of a baby dolphin killed by tourists who wanted to take photos with him. It's so sad ... So tourists should be more respectful of the  nature.

Tourism should also be a positive thing in the social standing, and thus to be respectful with the  local populations.<Base verbale après un modal Tourists must respect them just as much as the place which they are visiting. For example, some populations have special faiths, traditions, which tourists have to keep respect. In class, we saw the example of a sacred place where people tourists bathed for a movie. It offended the inhabitants and some critics were emitted. We can also notice the fact that some people consider the aboriginals as animals. It is disrespectful and so stupid! 

To conclude, we can say that to protect some countries resources with the from tourism, it's necessary to respect the  nature, the  cultural resources and the  local populations. It's a responsible tourism, a sustainable tourism, if we take care of the economic needs of the host countries.

Voilà, merci d'avance et navrée pour les fautes, j'ai tenté de faire de mon mieux ... ;-)

Ne te contente surtout pas du simple constat "La grammaire, ce n'est pas mon fort & navrée pour les fautes, j'ai tenté de faire de mon mieux " mais fais vraiment tout ce qu'il faut pour combler tes lacunes actuelles sans plus tarder. Un peu chaque jour mais assidûment pendant les mois à venir de manière à être au top pour le bac. Bon courage et bonne continuation.

[JulieH397]

Je crois que je vais surtout ressortir les cahiers de collège et reprendre tous les points importants en anglais que j'ai surement appris ... 

Merci !

[Jean B]

Le 26/2/2016 at 17:37, JulieH397 a dit :

Je crois que je vais surtout ressortir les cahiers de collège et reprendre tous les points importants en anglais que j'ai surement appris ...Voilà une sage décision. 

Merci !