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[Invité]

Bonjour ,

Pour le devoir anglais, j'ai besoin d'aide , pour la préparation de exposée en 5 minutes à l'oral , en anglais, je n'ai pas assez long mon texte pouvez vous m'aider si vous pouvez svp  c'est pour demain. Je l'ai traduite , je ai faite de fautes orthographes. Il manque de clarité , de idée essentielle , d'un plan .

voici je vous mets le fichier en pièce jointe.

Pouvez vous me corriger svp

anglais.doc

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Ta demande ci-dessus est quasi incompréhensible tellement elle est écrite dans un français pour le moins bizarre.  C'est d'autant plus étonnant que la traduction, si elle est de toi, n'est pas si mauvaise. Ayant actuellement d'autres obligations, je m'y pencherai dès que je pourrai, si possible aujourd'hui.

[Invité]

Je sais, en fairet je trouve que j'écris très confusément, malheureusement.

[Jean B]

 

Bonjour,

     George Orwell, the famous writer in the with fascinating rhetoric, wrote this book in the newspapers after various personal experiences. The remoteness of Being away from his native country and discovering the England United Kingdom pushed him in 1945 to publish Animal Farm in 1945, a satirical fable denouncing Stalinism and more generally all forms of totalitarianism and he published his novel 1984, in which he mentioned a totalitarian world in which the individual is crushed by the omnipotence of the state. Animal Farm is a novel with allegorical animals and animal fable in which individuals are personified, capable of thinking and acting. Each animal has its specific function that reflects its occupation in the diet. Can the story of what Orwell, published in 1945, can be considered a fable?

 

 To conduct this study, I would propose launching am going to develop a first part in which I will present the illustrious author George Orwell and his life before becoming interested, in a second part, in a novel that particularly pleased me in its ideology. To conclude, I would will answer the problem question.

 First, it seems necessary to state that George Orwell, whose real name was Eric Arthur Blair is an English writer whose books represent a commitment against the dictatorship, which marked the literature. Like other authors, he tries to fight the Soviet invader by the artistic proposal of a final moral. Animal Farm is purportedly a pamphlet prose in the manner of a fable that opposes communism. Published in 1945 after the Second World War, this book describes a farm where animals are tired of men and are involved in driving away the men’s omnipotence. Each character symbolizes something.

 Mr. Jones was a cruel farmer who owned held the farm animals into slavery. Old Major was an old pig attached to the farm. It is the animal that inspires everyone to dream of being freed from slavery by humans. Snowball was also a pig, he is one of the leaders of the rebellion. Snowball is very intelligent and compelling. It is a brilliant orator and pushes the firm to improve its quality of life and organization. Napoleon was also a pig who is second leader of the rebellion. By its diplomacy and its spirit of politician, sometimes it manages to promote alliances. Squealer was a pig shiny brilliant, very persuasive speaker, but unlike Snowball, much less likely to take the head with his own ideas. While much of the disobedience rebellion consisted of pigs, Boxer, as for him, was a workhorse. Extremely strong, most ambitious construction projects on The Animal Farm depend on his physical strength and his unconditional dedication to the rebellion. Clover is another workhorse. Blindly loyal to the rebellion, although it seems to doubt from time to time. Muriel was a goat, one of the most intelligent animals on the farm. She was a great friend of Clover. Benjamin was a donkey. Stubborn and reserved, he is one of the few farm animals that does not actively support the rebellion, but it does not condemn it either. Moses was a crow. It attracted many farm animals with SugarCandy mountain stories, a mythical place in the clouds.

 The original commandments are:

    Whatever goes upon two legs is an enemy.

    Whatever goes upon four legs, or has wings, is a friend.

    No animal shall wear clothes.

    No animal shall sleep in a bed.

    No animal shall drink alcohol.

    No animal shall kill any other animal.

    All animals are equal.

 Animal Farm is a pleasantly given way of life lesson. So I think Orwell's story can be seen as a fable by its length and morality that is given at the end of his reading.

NB Tu mélanges continuellement le présent et le prétérit tout au long de ton texte et c'est à éviter. Orwell a écrit ce roman il y a plusieurs dizaines de décennies  tout de même !  De même, tu emploies tantôt les pronoms neutres et/ou les pronoms masculin et féminin, c'est à éviter également. Le plus simple, puisque ces animaux sont personnifiés, c'est de n'employer que les pronoms masculin et féminin.