Expression écrite "droneboarding"

[Lyova]

Bonjour,

J'ai un devoir écrit, j'ai choisi le droneboarding. Pouvez-vous m'aider de corriger mon devoir s'il vous plait ? C'est la dernière note du 2ème trimestre !

Merci infiniment, Lyova

 

 I am going to present you the ”droneboarding”, the art of snowboarding towed by a drone.

 

You certainly know snowkiting. This is when you are pulled by a traction sail. And many netizens have imagined replace these sails by drones, to be pulled either by wind but by the power of their drones.

 

And the least we can say is that it seems working pretty good.  A video uploaded on YouTube by Kaspars Balamovskis testifies that. Indeed, he and the brand Aerones conducted a brief video presenting this new gliding discipline, which tends to be known as the "droneboarding”.

 

Of course, the “droneboarding” shows serious limitations, particularly in terms of sensations. A single drone can not pull an adult at high speeds. We are far from the effects of a sailing kite, for example, which can lift a man above the ground. We must therefore forget the tricks of snowboarders.

 

Anyway, UAV’s on the market are not designed for this purpose, but the most powerful of these machines can still move a human on a snowboard when they are pushed to full power. In a future more or less close, we will maybe see drones adapted to this new sport, who knows?

 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

I am going to present you the ”droneboarding” to you, the art of snowboarding towed by a drone. <== to present something to somebody // omission de "the" devant un nom employé dans la généralité

You certainly know snowkiting. This is when you are pulled by a traction sail. And many netizens have imagined devised a process for replacing these sails by drones, to be pulled either by the wind but or by the power of their drones.<== either...or // imagine n'a pas le sens de concevoir

And the least we can say is that it seems working to work pretty good.  A video uploaded on YouTube by Kaspars Balamovskis testifies that. Indeed, he and the brand Aerones conducted a brief video presenting this new gliding discipline which tends to be known as the  "droneboarding”. <== pas de virgule devant un connecteur, ici le pronom relatif which

Of course, the  “droneboarding” shows serious limitations, particularly in terms of sensations. A single drone cannot pull an adult at high speeds. We are far from the effects of a sailing kite, for example, which can lift a man above the ground. We must therefore forget the tricks of snowboarders.

Anyway, UAV’s on the market are not designed for this purpose, but the most powerful of these machines can still move a human on a snowboard when they are pushed to full power. In a more or less close future more or less close, we will maybe may/might see drones adapted to this new sport, who knows? <== le groupe adjectif DEVANT le nom // l'une ou l'autre forme du modal suffit à exprimer le degré voulu de l'éventualité dans le futur et ça "sonne plus authentiquement anglais".

[Lyova]

Merci beaucoup JRB pour la correction et surtout pour les conseils !!!!

[Jean B]

Il y a 2 heures, Lyova a dit :

Merci beaucoup JRB pour la correction et surtout pour les conseils !!!!

My pleasure!