Correction orthographe MOOCs

[diline]

Bonjour 
J'aurais besoin d'aide s'il vous plaît .
Pourriez-vous m'aider à corriger mes éventuelles fautes d'orthographe et me dire si ça a du sens ?
Merci beaucoup de votre aide.
C'est une synthèse que je dois faire sur les MOOCs.

 

Massive Open Online Courses are the latest development in Online education. This is a method to help student to complet their degree. It is a coursera who is easily accessible, simple of registration, really practical and free. There are more than 70.000 students who enrolled a week because they are opened to all. The courses on this coursera are very varied as for example economics, management, health, science, history, French, …

The only necessary elements to participate in a MOOC are a computer and an internet connection what allows teachers to be in contact with the students all around the wold. Students can follow the course distance at a time when he wishes without having the constraint to move. Furthermore, the MOOCs offers the luck to attend courses from top tier universities as Oxford or Harvard, that could be an advantage for students having an activity intense professional where those who do not have the means to follow studies where alive people in the poor countries so it give an opportunity to the students to have an acces to higher education.

But MOOCs raise some problems because if students are struggling to move forward or to divert a problem, they can not ask questions Because they do not exist direct links between teachers and students. Furthemore, there are not corrections of homework made by a professor, it is the students themselves who correct the work of other what can be considered as a way of learning by the students. Thus, students must take responsibility for their learning, because they are not supervised, they are left to themselves.

To conclude, I think that it would be necessary to have both educational systems : traditional system in the classroom and MOOC system which can be complementary. We could wonder if the MOOC system will be still free in the future ?

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

Massive Open Online Courses are the latest development in online education. This is a method to help students to complete their degrees. It is a coursera who is They are courses that are easily accessible, simple of registration to register at, really practical and free. < Dans ta première phrase, tu as commencé par le pluriel ; il est logique de continuer avec le pluriel.There are more than 70.000 students who enrolled for a week because they the courses are opened to all. < Ici, le pronom "they" est ambigu ; il faut reprendre le nom. The courses on this coursera are very varied as for example economics, management, health, science, history, French, …

The only necessary elements to participate in a MOOC are a computer and an Internet connection, what which allows teachers to be in contact with the students all around the world. <Après la virgule, le relatif which résume la proposition précédente = ce qui Students can follow the course from a distance at a time when he they wishes want without having the constraint to move. <Le pronom sujet doit être accordé en nombre avec le nom qu'il remplace. Furthermore, the MOOCs offers < Le sujet est un pluriel = pas de -S au verbe. the luck chance/opportunity to attend courses from top/best tier universities such as Oxford or Harvard. Nouvelle phrase> That could be an advantage for students having an intense professional activity <Les adjectifs AVANT le nom ! whereas those who do not have the means cannot afford to follow studies where alive are people living in the poor countries, so it MOOCs give them an opportunity to the students to have an access to higher education. <J'ai eu du mal à te suivre !

But MOOCs raise some problems: because if students are struggling to move forward or to divert <? C'est-à-dire ?  a problem, they cannot ask questions because they do not exist there are no direct links between teachers and students. Furthermore, there are not homework corrections made done by a professor, it is the students themselves who correct the work, of other what which can be considered as a way of self-improvement by the students. < Tu n'écris pas en français ! Thus, students must take responsibility for their learning because they are not supervised, they are left to themselves.

To conclude, I think that it would be necessary to have both educational systems : the traditional system one in the classroom and the MOOC system which can be complementary. < Le pronom "one" permet de remplacer le nom employé juste avant. We could wonder if the MOOC system will be still free in the future?. <wonder induit une interrogation indirecte = pas de point d'interrogation mais un point final.

[diline]

Merci beaucoup, 

Je vais corrigé mon travail au regard de vos remarques. 

[diline]

'' That could also be an advantage for students having an intense professional activity whereas those who cannot afford to follow studies are people living in poor countries, so MOOCs give them an apportunity to have an accsee to higher education. '' 

En gros, je veux dire que c'est bien pour les personnes qui ont une activité professionnelle intense, ceux qui ne peuvent pas financer leurs études et pour les pays les moins développés. 

[Jean B]

il y a 48 minutes, diline a dit :

'' That could also be an advantage for students having an intense professional activity whereas those who cannot afford to follow studies are people living in poor countries, so MOOCs give them an apportunity to have an access to higher education. '' 

En gros, je veux dire que c'est bien pour les personnes qui ont une activité professionnelle intense, ceux qui ne peuvent pas financer leurs études et pour les pays les moins développés. 

C'est bien le sens de la phrase.