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[Clacla56]

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I

The consumption took an importente place in our life.

Fathermore, special days are created such as Black Friday in the USA, but lot of states wich practise Black Friday: United Kingdom, Canada... It's the start of the period of shopping Christmas. It's a day when numerous stores make bargains to attract people. But this event it also know for it's sometimes mortal accidents. There ara a few victims of Black Friday. A shop assistant have died and an other woman was seriously injured. Today, one account 7 dead poeple. As we have seen in a video, this day can be compared with a jungle. Consumers are insane, frantic, ruthless. It shows a bad image of our society, we are selfih and pitiless.

II

a) Then, in the second part, we'll see the consequences of this consumption. To sart with, some artists denounce this phenomenom. For exemple, Barbara Kruger's photomontage. On this image, an Anonymous hand takes a card with a red background. On this card, there is a sentence: "I shop therefore I am". the card could be a credit card. The message makes reference to that of Descartes: "I think, therefore I am". She want's to criticizes consumer society and the behaviour in our society. The message which she makes pass adresses the people who are addicted to shopping and shopaholic. The message is: that we should stop consumming more than we need.

b) To continue in the consequences we go to see that people react and boycott this season of shopping. We were able to see in an interwiew of Kate Lasn for the CNN. The americains are compared to pigs in a ad because they are big consumers. They consumed 10 times more the Chinese, 30 times more than the Indian and 5 times more than the Mexicans. That engenders negative effects on the environment: climate change and pollution. "Buy nothing day" spends the same day as "Black Friday", it could hurt the economy but in a short term and americains must preserve the future generetions

 

Conclusion 

To conclude, several reasons we make increase the consumption of our society: the sales, hundreds of ads to make sell their products... However, this consumption has numerous consequences. The planet is affected by this change, it engenders of the pollution.

In my opinion, the consumption is not a primary source of happiness then it is necessary to find a just balance. The challenge would be to consume in a reasonable and responsible way.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

The Consumption took has taken an importante place in our life lives.

Furthermore, special sales days are created such as Black Friday in the USA, but lots of states wich practise Black Friday: the United Kingdom, Canada... It's the start of the Christmas shopping period of shopping Christmas. It's a day when numerous stores make bargains to attract people. But this event it also known for it's its sometimes mortal accidents. There are a few victims of Black Friday. A shop assistant have died and another woman was seriously injured. Today, one account 7 dead people are numbered. As we have seen in a video, this day can be compared with a jungle. Consumers are insane, frantic, ruthless. It shows a bad image of our society, we are selfih and pitiless.

II

a) Then, in the second part, we'll see the consequences of this consumption. To sart with, some artists denounce this phenomenom. For exemple, Barbara Kruger's photomontage. On this image, an anonymous hand takes a card with a red background. On this card, there is a sentence: "I shop therefore I am". the card could be a credit card. The message makes reference to that of Descartes: "I think, therefore I am". She It wants to criticizes consumer society and the behaviour in our society. The message which she it makes pass conveys adresses the people who are addicted to shopping and are shopaholic. The message is:  we should stop consuming more than we need.

b) To continue in the consequences we are going to see that people react and boycott this shopping season of shopping. We were able to see in an interwiew of Kate Lasn for the CNN. The Americans are compared to pigs in an ad because they are big consumers. They consumed 10 times more than the Chinese, 30 times more than the Indians and 5 times more than the Mexicans. That engenders causes negative effects on the environment: climate change and pollution. "Buy nothing day" spends is spent the same day as "Black Friday", it could hurt harm the economy but in a short term and Americans must preserve the future generations

 

Conclusion 

To conclude, several reasons we make us increase the consumption of in our society: the sales, hundreds of ads to make customers sell buy their products... However, this consumption has numerous consequences. The planet is affected by this change, it engenders of the creates/causes pollution.

In my opinion, the consumption is not a primary source of happiness then it is necessary to find a just balance. The challenge would be to consume in a reasonable and responsible way.

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