English Work Presentation - Need Help

[LacertaeNova]

Bonjour à tous,

Je dois effectuer une présentation orale pour ce jeudi-ci, j'aimerai savoir si cela tient la route du point de vue vocabulaire, grammaire, orthographe.
Je me suis relu à maintes reprises et j'aurais besoin d'une expertise !
Le vocabulaire employé est simple car il nous a été demandé de faire au plus simple mais sans fautes
Si en plus vous pouvez en m'indiquant les erreurs me faire comprendre pourquoi je les ai fais et comment les résoudre à l'avenir, c'est un indéniable plus x)

Voici le texte en question :

A.H.A.M specializes in education and professional insertion, it operates (due to 47 employees and 72 volunteers) in 7 neighborhoods in Le Havre and Harfleur. The head office is based in Le Havre 17 rue Anfray. A.H.A.M was born in 1957, the company has good results and their turnover is around € 3,000,000. Their main competitor is training organizations (CCI&Caux, Fodeno, AFPA…).

I work in I.T Department as I.T teacher, my job consist of initiating costumer about computer. The costumers are beginners, experienced, or disabled persons. I teach several domains as Office, Windows, Web Browsing, Multimedia and Maintenance.
My colleagues are other teachers in other domains (drawing, painting, theatre, gymnastic…), one secretary and my manager, the staff listens to each other’s and contribute a good atmosphere.
To conclude, the maintenance of computers and network is assured by a subcontractor named Infoteam.

 

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

A.H.A.M specializes in education and professional insertion. Nouvelle phrase> it operates (due to Thanks to 47 employees and 72 volunteers it operates in 7 neighborhoods in Le Havre and Harfleur. The head office is based in Le Havre 17 rue Anfray. A.H.A.M was born in 1957, the company has good results and their turnover is around € 3,000,000. Their main competitor is training organizations (CCI&Caux, Fodeno, AFPA…).

I work in the I.T Department as an I.T teacher.  <- Le service informatique en question est forcément déterminé = the ::: <- a/an obligatoire devant un nom concret attribut du sujet. Nouvelle phrase> My job consists of  in initiating introducing customers about to computers. The Customers are beginners, experienced, or disabled persons. <- Omission de "the" devant les noms employés dans la généralité. I teach several domains such as Office, Windows, Web Browsing, Multimedia and Maintenance.
My colleagues are other teachers in other domains (drawing, painting, theatre, gymnastics…), one secretary and my manager, (the members of) the staff listens to each other’s and contribute to creating a good atmosphere.  <- Bien que le nom staff puisse se mettre au pluriel, il est généralement plutôt considéré comme un indénombrable de sens pluriel = verbe au pluriel c-à-d sans -s.
To conclude, the maintenance of computers and network is assured carried out/operated by a subcontractor named Infoteam.

Good job!