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[Clacla56]

Voici le texte suivant, je voulais savoir si il y avait des chose à améliorer ou des fautes ... Merci de votre correction, petite précision, c'est pour un oral 

 

The consumstion is described today like purchases with essential needs. In this consumers society, consumers are driven to consume various products. This expenditures can be unnecessary or vital. We can see trough different types of documents, how this society is represented. So we can ask: is consumption source of happiness ? Initially we will see the positive aspects of this consumption and then in one second part, we will also address the negative consequences of this society. 

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Le 29/11/2015 19:10:41, Clacla56 a dit :

Voici le texte suivant, je voulais savoir si il y avait des chose à améliorer ou des fautes ... Merci de votre correction, petite précision, c'est pour un oral 

The Consumption is described today like purchasing with for essential needs. <- omission de "the" devant un nom employé dans la généralité. In this consumers society, consumers are driven to eat/consume various products. These expenditures can be unnecessary or vital. We can see trough different types of documents how this society is represented. So we can ask wonder: is consumption source of happiness? Initially we will see the positive aspects of this consumption and then in one a second part, we will also address <??? c'est-à-dire ??? the negative consequences of this society. 

 

[Clacla56]

merci beaucoup
 @JRB