Correction please

[Valoutin]

Bonjour, j'aimerais sollicité votre aide pour corriger mes éventuels fautes ou structures phrases incorrectes pour ma tâche finale. Je vous en remercies d'avance  Le contexte de cette Tâche finale est une sorte d'élection de délégué de classe, voilà. 

I've got a simple, simple, simple question for you. Here's the question "Do you believe that one day you're not living in a world that was given to you, that's right, you're going to actually live in the world that you dreamed of" This is a picture I have in my mind, we are in the High School 28 hours a week. So It's absolutely comprehensible If we want some changes. I writte down something in our timetable, someday we have two hours for eat but we take again class at 12h30. Why they don't place this subject after 10h30, if they had done that, we retake class at 15h00. It is an optimization of our timetable. It's an idea If I am elected to the class president. 

You certainly have a question for me "Why we gonna vote for you ?" And you're right, why ? Because I'm not afraid of speaking in front of people, I'm not afraid of speaking in front of teachers. Deliver a speech for me is something natural and I love it. So I can repeat what you want in the council of class. Especially I can hear you if you don't want to speak with teachers or somedy else. I'm here to take away a weight from you shoulders. 

To be honest, I'd like to make everything better. We can say I'm a perfectionist, but the idea of perfection doesn't exist and we don't have to be perfect. We don't have to be perfection, to do what we want, to have what we want, to be what we want. And sometimes teachers want us to be perfect, it's a liar, in our world we don't have to be perfect to sucess in our student life. An other thing I want to change It's the discover of subject. If we compare the others High School we don't have enough of that subject. The discover of subject learn incredible things, for our future, for an example the biotechnology is ressourceful for the people who want to work in the sciences, or the heathl and sociology for me is more useful than maths, because I'm very interesed by the links beetween the illness and the social well-being. 

Well I finish my speech, and to conclude I want to say, If you want to change, If you want to be part of something big, vote for me. Thanks for you attention. 

 

 

 

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

I've got a simple, simple, simple question for you. Here's the question "Do you believe that one day you'rell not be living in a world that was given to you, that's right, you're going to actually live in the world that you dreamed of" This is a picture I have in my mind, we are in at the high school 28 hours a week. So It's absolutely comprehensible If we want some changes. I written have noted/noticed something in our timetable: some days we have two hours for eat lunchtime break but we take again resume classes at 12.30 noon. <N'est-ce pas contradictoire ? Why they don't didn't they place this subject after 10.30am? If they had done that so, we retake would resume classes at 15h00 3pm. <Au past perfect de la subordonnée  correspond le present conditional dans la principale. La concordance des temps fonctionne exactement comme en français. Revois également comment s'écrit l'heure en anglais. It is an optimization of our timetable. It's an idea If I am elected to as the class president representative.

You certainly have a question for me "Why are we going/gonna to vote for you?" And you're right, why? Because I'm not afraid of speaking in front of people, I'm not afraid of speaking in front of teachers. Delivering a speech for me is something natural and I love it.<Un infinitif ne peut pas prendre la fonction sujet d'un verbe, un gérondif (v-ing) si.  So I can repeat what you want in before the council of class staff meeting. Especially I can hear listen to you if you don't want to talk/speak with teachers or somebody else. I'm here to take away a weight from you shoulders. 

To be honest, I'd like to make everything better. We can say I'm a perfectionist, but the idea of perfection doesn't exist and we don't have to be perfect. <That's right, nobody's perfect! We don't have to be perfection, to do what we want, to have what we want, to be what we want. And sometimes teachers want us to be perfect, it's a liar lie in our world we don't have to be perfect to sucess succeed in our student life. Another thing I want to change It's is the way we discover of subjects. If we compare the our high school with others we don't have are not given enough of that subject on that point. The discover of subject learn Discovering subjects teaches us incredible things for our future for an example the such as biotechnology which is resourceful for the people who want to work in the sciences, or the health and sociology. < teach = enseigner/apprendre qqch à qqn <---> learn = apprendre qqch pour soi. Ne les confonds donc pas. > Nouvelle phrase, sinon tu vas perdre haleine !  for To me/To my mind such subjects are more useful than maths, because I'm very interested by the links beetween the illnesses and the social well-being. 

Well I have finished my speech and to conclude I want to say, If you want to change, If you want to be part of something big, vote for me. Thanks for you attention. 

Should you need more explanations, feel free to ask me.

[Valoutin]

Ah je vous remercie, vous m'apportez une aide énorme. J'aimerais savoir, je sais que je peux trouver cette réponse mais vu que vous êtes là je vous la pose. J'ai assez de mal à faire une phrase en anglais. Je m'explique, je peux vous traduire sans grande difficulté une phrase en Anglais, mais traduire une phrase de Français à Anglais, je n'y arrives pas. Auriez-vous des conseils pour m'aider ? 

I say again, Thanks you.

 

[Jean B]

Ah je vous remercie, vous m'apportez une aide énorme. J'aimerais savoir, je sais que je peux trouver cette réponse mais vu que vous êtes là je vous la pose. J'ai assez de mal à faire une phrase en anglais. Je m'explique, je peux vous traduire sans grande difficulté une phrase en anglais, mais traduire une phrase de français à anglais, je n'y arrives pas. < La principale raison, tu viens de la donner toi-même, c'est  précisément le passage préalable par le français.

Auriez-vous des conseils pour m'aider ? < Quand tu te mets à l'anglais, que ce soit à l'oral ou à l'écrit, il faut absolument te détacher du français, l'oublier complètement pour te concentrer sur la construction, la syntaxe, la grammaire, le vocabulaire de l'anglais. Je suis bien placé pour savoir que c'est plus facile à dire (ou à écrire ici) qu'à faire mais avec de la pratique, de la persévérance et du temps on y arrive très bien. Bien sûr cela implique que tu maîtrises la grammaire fondamentale, l'acquisition du vocabulaire se faisant plus naturellement avec la pratique qui en facilite la mémorisation. Pour ce faire, n'hésite pas à lire tout ce qui te tombe sous la main, à voir des films en VO sous-titrés dans un premier temps puis en VO intégrale, à écouter des radios anglophones, des chanteurs et chanteuses et/ou groupes anglophones, ce qui "forme" ton oreille aux sonorités spécifiques de la langue. Un site tel que www.anglaisfacile.com est une véritable mine de ressources de toutes sortes et, si tu ne l'as pas encore fait, je te conseille de t'y inscrire, tout y est gratuit. Il y a même un forum où tu peux demander de l'aide. Mais comme écrit précédemment, la clé du succès se trouve dans la persévérance. As you must know, "Rome was not built in a day".

I say again, thanks you. My pleasure.