Problème de conjugaison, besoin d'aide

[loanne13]

 

Hi !!

I’ m Loanne******. I will tell you my summer vacations. All teenagers wait them

 

Every summer with my father, we going in a camping at Argeles, at the seaside. We have a cravan but me I prefer sleeping in camping tent.

I am beach bum beacause i love put my feet up.  I go to beach with my funny friends, we listen the music of the moment, sometimes i dive from rocks with my friend, and it scared me. All girls likes have tanned skin for back to school, then the odor of suntan… I love that !  With girls, we talking all time about the swimming pool, you know what, of course… Watching the beautiful boys as they play at the beach ball.

Out of the question to do sports, runing, wort out… ! I don’t pay much attention to health, in summer when the sun is shining and it's hot outside, it’s the ideal moment to relax and eat an ice cream at the snack’s beach.

 

But my favourite activities in summer is go out at night  , we wear beautiful clothes, wear very nice dresses. We join our friends on the beach every night, light a big fire, we talk about, grilled chamalows, met people, sometimes is english people it’s very funny time.

Every time i travel with my mother, this year i went to Portugal just for surfing on the big waves. Also I went to brazil, the sea was lovely, at Copacabana you can see the Corcovado  , it was just magic view , made paddle. Also I was visite Spain, the seaside and i was do shopping of course !

 

 

[Jean B]

Hello,

Hi !!

I’ m Loanne******. I'm will going to tell you my summer vacations.< Le présent be going to + V quand la décision est déjà prise. All teenagers are waiting for them.< Sans vouloir t'offenser, le présent simple induirait que les collégien(ne)s ne fréquentent leur établissement que pour attendre les grandes vacances.

Every summer with my father, we going in to a camping site at Argeles, at the seaside. < Le présent simple quand il s'agit d'une habitude, comme ici. We have a caravan but me I prefer sleeping in a camping tent. <Moi je se rend par le seul pronom sujet que l'on accentue fortement à l'oral.

I am a beach bum because i I love to put my feet up.<???  I go to the beach with my funny friends, we listen to the current music of the moment, sometimes i dive from rocks with my friend and it scared scares me/it's scary/frightening. All girls likes to have tanned skin for before going back to school, then the odor of suntan… I love that ! <Le présent simple ne prend un -s final que si le sujet est singulier. // V-ing après une préposition With my girlfriends, we talking all time keep on talking about the swimming pool, you know what, of course…<Le présent simple quand il s'agit d'une activité fréquente/habituelle, bis ! Révise ta grammaire avant qu'il ne soit trop tard. Watching the beautiful good-looking/handsome boys as they play at the are playing beach ball. <Le présent be V-ing quand il s'agit d'une activité ponctuelle/en cours d'exécution.

Out of the question to Doing sports, running, working out/is out of the question/no way! I don’t pay much attention to health, in summer when the sun is shining and it's hot outside, it’s the ideal moment to relax and eat an ice cream at the snack’s beach snack bar. <Dans 1 nom composé de nom + nom, le nom noyau se place après puisque le nom qui a valeur d'adjectif qualificatif se place avant. Capice ?

But my favourite activitiesy in summer is go going out at night. <* Sujet pluriel + verbe singulier, bravo !   * Seul un gérondif (V-ing) peut prendre les fonctions d'un nom, comme ici celle de COD du verbe is. Nouvelle phrase> We put on/wear beautiful nice/smart clothes, wear very nice dresses. We join our friends on the beach every night, light a big fire, we talk about, grilled chamalows,<??? meet people, sometimes is English people, it’s a very funny time. <Les adjectifs et noms de nationalités prennent tous une majuscule, mémorise-le.

Every time i  travel with my mother, this year i  went to Portugal just for surfing on the big waves. Also I went to Brazil, the sea was lovely, at Copacabana you can see the Corcovado, it was just a magic view, made did standup paddleboarding. Also I was also visited Spain, the seaside and i  was do did some shopping of course!

* Dois-je te rappeler que le pronom sujet de la première personne singulier ne s'écrit qu'en MAJUSCULE ? C'est à croire que l'appui sur la touche dédiée de ton clavier te demande un effort surhumain !

* La lecture de ton écrit me laisse un goût désagréable de "vite-fait/je-m'en-débarrasse". Apprends à te relire systématiquement car un jour d'examen personne ne le fera à ta place.

Bonne continuation.