Entraînement pour l'expression écrite du bac

[soso73100]

Bonjour,

Étant vraiment nulle en anglais, je m'entraîne au bac d'anglais dès maintenant afin d'être prête. Voilà, si quelqu'un pouvait bien m'aider.

 

A reality show is a television show in which member of the public or celebrities are filmed living their everyday lives or undertaking specifics challenges. So, i don't know if i will tempted by taking part in this kind of show.

At first sight, i will decline.

First, i find this kind of show are stupids and not interessing. Look, for exemple, "L'amour est dans le pré". Who would find love in the TV ?! Moreover, this show show a negative and stereotype vision of farmers like be ugly, stupids and always alone.

Secondly, i don't know if i will really wanted be famous and have lot of fans, because i like my current life as a normal personn with my friends and my family.

Thirdly, i don't want to be controled by the TV, the producers as in "Les anges" who people have to obey and do what the producers say like fighting over with others contestant or kiss a man who you don't love just for "the show" !

Finally, i think it's a waster of time for nothing. Indeed, i would like to do longs years to study to become doctor and i do not have time to do stupids things like this.

 

However, it could be a good experience to meet, make news friends and explore news horizons like in "Kolanta". Moreover, you only live once and, sometimes, doing stupids things could be fun.

Afterward, the prize of this kind of show is often verry attractive. Do you realize how much you can win just by taking part to a TV reality show. In the show named "who is the mole", if you are the mole, everytime you make loose an other contestant, you win 500 €.

 

In conclusion, i didn't like to taking part of a TV reality show but, if the prize is verry interessing and the game morte intelligent than habitual reality show, why not ?

 

 

Merci d'avance.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Bonjour,

Étant vraiment nulle en anglais, je m'entraîne au bac d'anglais dès maintenant afin d'être prête. Voilà, si quelqu'un pouvait bien m'aider.

Pourquoi pas mais si tu ne redoubles pas d'efforts pour combler tes lacunes de grammaire je crains que ton entraînement soit aussi peu efficace que vouloir remplir d'eau un seau percé.

A reality show is a television show in which members of the public or celebrities are filmed living their everyday lives or undertaking specifics challenges. So, i don't know if i will would be tempted by taking to take part in this kind of show.

At first sight, i will would decline.

* L'adjectif épithète est INVARIABLE. Cette faute ne pardonne pas au bac.

* Le pronom sujet 1ère personne singulier ne s'écrit qu'en MAJUSCULE !

* Il faut absolument que tu apprennes à différencier le futur, temps du réel proche, du conditionnel, temps de l'irréel, de l'éventuel.

First, i find this kind of show are stupids and not interessting.

* this + nom singulier + verbe singulier <===> these + nom pluriel + verbe pluriel

* ADJECTIF INVARIABLE

Look, for exemple, "L'amour est dans le pré". Who would find love in the on TV ?! Moreover, this show show a negative and stereotype vision of farmers like be ugly, stupids and always alone.

Secondly, i don't know if i will really wanted be famous and have lot of fans, because i like my current life as a normal personn with my friends and my family.

Thirdly, i don't want to be controled by the TV, the producers as in "Les anges" who people have to obey and do what the producers say like fighting over with others contestant* or kiss a man who you don't love just for "the show" !

Finally, i think it's a waster of time for nothing. Indeed, i would like to do longs years to study to become x doctor and i do not have time to do stupids things like this.

However, it could be a good experience to meet, make news friends and explore news horizons like in "Kolanta". Moreover, you only live once and, sometimes, doing stupids things could be fun.

Afterward, the prize of this kind of show is often verry attractive. Do you realize how much you can win just by taking part to a TV reality show? In the show named "who is the mole", if you are the mole, everytime you make loose another contestant, you win 500 €.

In conclusion, i didn't like to taking part of a TV reality show but, if the prize is verry interessing and the game morte intelligent than habitual reality show, why not ?

Merci d'avance.

Trop, c'est trop, désolé ; je me suis fait violence mais c'est au dessus de mes forces et de ma patience.  Quelqu'un d'autre que moi aura peut-être le courage de te venir en aide.

 

[Ezehkiel Jones]

Hello ! J'ai tenté de reprendre et de compléter, espérant n'avoir pas laissé de fautes, mais je pense m'être un peu perdu dans ce montant de fautes. Cependant, c'est une bonne initiative de vouloir travailler et essayer de combler ces lacunes. Mais quelles lacunes ! En dernière classe, c'est inquiétant.

"Look, for exemple example, "L'amour est dans le pré". Who would find love in the on TV ?! Moreover, this show show reveals a negative and stereotyped vision view of farmers  like be ugly, stupidsand always alone. Indeed, they are stigmatized as ugly, stupid and single persons.

Secondly, i don't know if i will really wanted I would really like to be famous and have a lot of fans, because i like I enjoy my current life as a normal personn with my friends and my family.

Thirdly, i don't want to be controled by the TV, the producers as in "Les anges" who to whom people have to obey and do what the producers they say like fighting over with others contestants or kissing a man who you don't that you love just for "the show" !

Finally, i think it's a waster of time for nothing. Indeed, i would like to do longs years to study undertake lengthy studies in order to become a doctor and i do not have time to do stupids things like this.

However, it could be a good experience to meet, make news new (Comme le dit JRB, l'adjectif est TOUJOURS invariable en anglais) friends and explore news new horizons like in "Koh-lanta". Moreover, you only live once and, sometimes, doing stupids stupid things could can be fun.

Afterward, the prize of this kind of show is often verry attractive. Do you realize how much you can win earn just by taking part to in a TV reality show? In the show named "who is the mole", if you are the mole, everytime you make loose another contestant lose, you win earn (earn=gagner quand il s'agit d'argent) 500 €.

In conclusion, i didn't I wouldn't like to taking take part of in a TV reality show but, if the prize is verry interessing interesting and the game morte intelligent than habitual usual reality shows, then why not ?"

Good luck,

[soso73100]

Merci pour votre correction mais je vous trouve très dures sachant que certaines phrases ont été écrites par ma prof d'anglais et ayant pour seul moyen d'accéder à internet une tablette qui corrige tout ce qu'elle veut à sa sauce...

je vous remercie tout de même mais si ça vous gave tellement autant ne pas le faire.

 

[Jean B]

Je doute que ce soit ta tablette qui commette ces fautes toute seule...! Si ça te "gave" (sic) tellement de lire nos remarques et corrections et d'en faire ton profit, tu es entièrement libre d'aller voir ailleurs.

Un dernier conseil cependant : ce n'est pas en venant poster ici ou ailleurs tes "entraînements" pour les faire corriger que tu progresseras. Il faut au contraire que tu acquières les bases qui te font si cruellement défaut aujourd'hui en les bûchant dans une grammaire, en répétant des exercices d'application jusqu'à ce que tu les maîtrises. Un site comme www.anglaisfacile.com peut t'y aider à condition que tu y travailles assidûment. Bon courage.