Correction D'un Texte

[Invité]

Bonjour, j'ai écrit un texte en anglais et je voudrais savoir si il y a des fautes, je remarque egalement que certaines phrases sont mal tournés, pouvez-vous m'aider? Pouvez-vous le corriger?

 

 

"Today, people, all generations, give too much importance to physical appearance. When a woman or a man are not the same physical appearance that other people, they are not good accept in society. But the behaviour, the personality are not important. For example, when we go for to have a job, our physical appearance is very important. To have good clothes is the one of things important. Actually, in society, the first jugement, when we weet people, is the must important. A person can have looks different of we, but she can has the same personality and she can a great people even if she looks strange! When we meet new people, we don't just look her this appearance but to speak, to discover the personality of this person. In the society, we can see diffezrent groups with different physical appearance. For example, people with baggy pants and dreadlocks and people who wear black clothes everytime "gothick". Thus, a person can have a good phydical appearance bu have a bad personality."

 

 

Merci d'avance

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

 

Bonjour, j'ai écrit un texte en anglais et je voudrais savoir s'il y a des fautes. Je remarque également que certaines phrases sont mal tournées. Pouvez-vous m'aider? Pouvez-vous le corriger?

 

 

"Today people from all generations give/lend/attach too much importance to physical appearance. When a woman or a man are have not the same physical appearance that as other people's, they are not good well accepted/well-thought-of in society. But their behaviours and personalities are not important. <<<Es-tu bien sûre de ça ? For example, when we go for to have a job interview, our physical appearance is very important. To have Wearing nice/good clothes is the one of things sole/only important thing.<<< En lisant ça, je suis sûr que les recruteurs et autres DRH vont s'arracher les cheveux ! Actually, in society, the first jugement, when we weet people, is the must important  Sizing somebody up at a glance is the most important thing in our present society. A person People can have looks look different of from we us but she they can has have the same personality and she can a be great people even if she they look strange! When we meet new people, we don't just look her this at their appearances but to speak, to we talk with them and discover their personalities. of this person In the society, we can see diffezrent various groups with different physical appearances. For example, people with baggy pants and dreadlocks and people who always wear black Gothic clothes everytime "gothick". Thus a person can have a good physical appearance yet/but have a bad personality."

 

 

Merci d'avance