Production Orale - Célébrités

[ruedesetoiles]

Bonjour,

 

Je suis nouvelle sur ce site et j'ai besoin de vos corrections.

J'ai un devoir à faire en Anglais, il s'agit d'un devoir oral.

 

Voici les consignes :

Your situation

You are an enthusiastic supporter of your favourite English language radio station. You have a very strong opinion about the role of celebrities in the media and the image they vehicle.

Your task

Read or listen to each of the following documents and record a voice message for your local

radio expressing your feelings and your reaction each time. (Each recording must last at

least 1 minute 30 seconds, so you need to justify your reaction with a detailed explanation

of your feelings. You may include references to other celebrities or famous events.)

 

Doc 1 : Bed in for Peace :

I'm an old hippy and I look back with fond memories and some sadness at what might have been. It was an awakening of the soul that started on the west coast of the USA and spread around the world. A recognition that we are all the same that artificial borders drawn on a map and repressive laws imposed for the common good were not the way to go. The freedom of the individual was paramount provided it did no harm to others and then it all went to hell and now here we are. Forty years later and the world is now finally at peace, great job John. ---- give peace a chance was a nice idea and topical of the time but I'm sorry but if the best you can do for world peace is set in a bed, call the press and tell everyone to embrace free love it is well, not very effective. This was just a bunch of crap to begin with. Those so-called celebrities just do this to get in the news and try to make a name for themselves. They were feeling quite hot at the time and wanted to stay in bed and do what they could do best most likely. They were probably high on weed like the rest of the flower children.

 

Doc 2 : Prince Harry

Smoked cannabis at 17

Clashed with paparazzi

Wore a Nazi uniform at a fancy dress

party

Used a racist term to address a Pakistani

colleague

Filmed a mock mobile call to the

Queen, saying: ‘Granny I’ve got to go,

got to go, send my love to the Corgis

and Grandpa. I’ve got to go, got to

go, bye. God Save You… yeah, that’s

great.”

 

Doc 3 : Slumdog Millionaire

From the moment the two 8-year-old child stars, Azharuddin Ismail and Rubina Ali, stepped intothe limelight of the film set, of the multi Oscar Awardwinning film, Slumdog Millionaire, they were doomed to becoming the center of controversy. First there came the complaints from their families, that the children did not receive enough compensation for their acting roles, in a movie that has already grossed over $80 million worldwide. Controversy has raged over the studios decision to pay for the children’s schooling, but not give them any large amount of money until they are 18 years old. Two months ago Azharuddin’s family were evicted from their slum hovel and the child star has been forced to live underneath a plastic tarpaulin. There have been a series of clashes with the parents over money, as the studios want the children to have long term benefits from their film debut. “People would rightly question whether giving the children a large amount of money was responsible,” says the film producer Christian Colson. When the studio wanted to take the children to the Oscars, their parents allegedly refused to sign the passport papers, saying they would rather be paid airfares in cash.

 

 

On me demande d'exprimer mon opinion sur ces évènements, voici mes réponses :

 

- Bed in for Peace

Texte en anglais :

It is that celebrities, due to their popularity, organize actions in order to fight for peace. The Beatles were popular and here John Lennon and his wife Yoko Ono have acted to promote peace in the world. However, I can not find the ratio be photographed in his marital bed to promote peace. It can be I think a form of humour, in any case it is very original!

Texte en français :

Il est bien que les célébrités, de par leur popularité, organisent des actions afin de lutter pour la paix. Les Beatles étaient populaires et ici John Lennon et sa femme Yoko Ono ont agis pour promouvoir la paix dans le monde.

Toutefois, je ne trouve pas le rapport entre être photographié dans son lit conjugal et promouvoir la paix. Ce peut être je pense une forme d’humour, en tout cas c’est très original !

 

- Prince Harry :

Texte en anglais :

My avi, Prince Harry had been displaced behaviours. By virtue of its function, it must be serious and maintain a good image in the media. It represents the Royal family and therefore must have a good reputation.

It must respect the laws of the country and do not smoke cannabis. Out of respect for others, it doesn't have to hold racist or wear a Nazi uniform, especially in days of remembrance of the Holocaust. It has shocked the public and conveys a bad image of the Royal family.

Texte en français :

A mon avi, le prince Harry a eu des comportements déplacés. De par sa fonction, il se doit d’être sérieux et de maintenir une bonne image dans les médias. Il représente la famille Royale et doit donc avoir une bonne réputation. Il doit respecter les lois du pays et ne pas fumer de cannabis. Par respect pour les autres, il n’a pas à tenir de propos racistes ou de porter un uniforme Nazi, surtout à quelques jours de la commémoration de la Shoah. Il a choqué l’opinion publique et véhicule une mauvaise image de la famille royale.

 

- Slumdog Millionaire

Texte en anglais :

It is a very delicate controversy. Children played in a movie a very big success, but they live in slums. Their parents believe that they have not received enough compensation. I think it's normal that they want to earn more money in order to provide adequate housing for the whole family.

Texte en français :

C’est une controverse très délicate. Les enfants ont joués dans un film ayant eu un très gros succès, mais ils vivent dans des bidonvilles. Leurs parents estiment qu’ils n’ont pas reçus suffisamment de rémunération. Je pense que c’est normal qu’ils souhaitent gagner plus d’argent pour pouvoir offrir un logement convenable à l’ensemble de la famille.

 

Pourriez-vous corriger mes réponses ? Merci

- ruedesetoiles -

 

 

[Jean B]

Bonsoir,

 

C'est la dernière fois que je rappelle l'inanité d'écrire d'abord en français un texte destiné à l'anglais, même oral. Pourtant ça devrait tomber sous le sens mais non, rien n'y fait.

 

- Bed in for Peace

 

It is that celebrities, Due to their popularity celebrities are right to organize actions in order to fight for peace. The Beatles were popular and here John Lennon and his wife Yoko Ono have acted to promote peace in the world.<< action passée/terminée/datée = prétérit  However I cannot<< s'écrit en 1 seul mot find the ratio link/connection between being photographed in his marital bed to and promoting peace.<<Quel dictionnaire utilises-tu ? It can be I think it may be a form of humour, in any case it is very original! << may/might s'utilise pour exprimer une éventualité/supposition/hypothèse

 

- Prince Harry :

 

My avi, << I think Prince Harry had been displaced behaviours misbehaved/behaved badly. <<Ne me dis pas que tu confonds be et have ! Le past perfect de have, c'est had had By virtue of its function being a royal, it he must be serious and maintain a good image in the media. It   represents the royal family and therefore must have a good reputation.<<Ignores-tu qu'il y a 3 genres en anglais ? Tant qu'à y être, tu as commis la même faute 4 fois de suite, bravo !

It must respect the laws of the country and do not smoke cannabis.<< base verbale après un modal Out of respect for others, it  doesn't have to hold say racist things/make racist remarks or wear a Nazi uniform, especially in days of remembrance of the Holocaust. It has shocked the public and conveyed a bad image of the royal family.

 

- Slumdog Millionaire

 

It is a very delicate controversy. Children played in a movie that was a great/very big success but they live in slums. Their parents believe that they have did not received receive enough compensation.<< événement passé/terminé/daté = prétérit  I think it's normal that they want to earn more money in order to provide adequate housing for the whole family.

 

Te rends-tu compte à présent de l'étendue des dégâts qu'une "pseudo-traduction" peut faire ? Par ailleurs, tu as un certain nombre de lacunes qu'il te faut absolument combler avant la fin de cette année scolaire. C'est dommage car ton expression est plutôt pas mal. Au boulot !

[ruedesetoiles]

Bonjour JRB,

 

Je te remercie de ta correction. elle est très claire et efficace. J'ai d'énormes lacunes en anglais (dans les langues en général). Je travail par correspondance. Je n'ai donc pas de professeur et mes cours ne sont pas au top. J'essaye toutefois de m'améliorer avec des formules achetées, mais sans prof, c'est dur !

 

Merci encore de ta correction,

 

-ruedesetoiles-

[Jean B]

Désolé de te contredire au moins sur un point : même si tu travailles par correspondance, (peut-être avec le CNED ?) tu as forcément affaire à un professeur. Si les cours ne te paraissent pas "top", n'hésite pas à questionner, à demander des explications, des précisions supplémentaires et aussi souvent que tu le juges nécessaire. L'avantage de l'internet c'est que la communication est instantanée et sans frais de timbre.