alan.ld Posté(e) le 2 janvier 2015 Signaler Posté(e) le 2 janvier 2015 Bonjour et bonne année ! J'ai un devoir à faire pour la rentrée, je dois répondre à la question "Would you like to live in the USA ?" en 200 mots. J'aimerais juste que quelqu'un m'aide à corriger et à expliquer mes fautes pour progresser. Voilà Merci d'avance ! First of all, as regards the question of the job. In fact I dream to work in Microsoft (Redmond, next to Seattle) or Apple (Cupertino in the Silicon Valley), so I would like to live in the West Coast. I dream of the American Way of Life! I dream to live in this modern country. This may be true that in the USA, there are socials inequality but it’s the same thing everywhere in the world. We are obliged to note that despite of terrorism and shootings, it’s a country where safety reign. Indeed, USA have a very powerful army. Terrorism and shootings don’t afraid me because I find that among 316 millions of inhabitants, a very tiny part of the population is victim of this scourges and the risk is anywhere… I also think the risk is the same in Europe. Going to live in the USA mean leave my family! I wonder whether if it’s really a problem because know, with new technologies, we can easily keep contact. I think nothing can put a damper on my dream to live in the USA. And on the top of that, leave in the USA permit to become bilingual, it’s essential in the background of computing, it’s even the universal tongue.
E-Bahut Jean B Posté(e) le 2 janvier 2015 E-Bahut Signaler Posté(e) le 2 janvier 2015 Bonsoir, On sent que la rentrée approche...! Bonjour et bonne année ! J'ai un devoir à faire pour la rentrée, je dois répondre à la question "Would you like to live in the USA ?" en 200 mots. J'aimerais juste que quelqu'un m'aide à corriger et à expliquer mes fautes pour progresser. Voilà Merci d'avance ! First of all, as regards the question of the a job, In fact I dream to work of working in for Microsoft (Redmond, next to Seattle) or Apple (Cupertino in the Silicon Valley).<< rêver de faire qqch = to dream of + v-ing, mémorise-le. Nouvelle phrase>> So I would like to live in on the West Coast. I dream of the American way of life! I dream to live of living in this modern country. This It may be true that in the USA there are socials << l'adjectif est INVARIABLE inequalities but it’s the same thing everywhere in the world. We are obliged to note that despite of << soit c'est in spite of, soit despite tout court terrorism and shootings, it’s a country where safety reigns.<< -s au présent simple d'un verbe dont le sujet est singulier, élémentaire mon cher Watson ! Indeed the USA have a very powerful army. Terrorism and shootings don’t afraid scare/frighten me because I find think that among 316 millions of inhabitants, a very tiny part of the population is the victim of this <<this + singulier <---> these + pluriel these scourges and the risk is anywhere… I also think the risk is the same in Europe. Going to live in the USA means leaving my family! I wonder whether if it’s really a problem because know << relis-toi we can now keep in contact touch easily thanks to/with new technologies. I think nothing can put a damper on my dream to live of living in the USA. And on the top of that leave living in the USA permit will enable me to become bilingual. it’s Commanding the English language is essential in the background field of computing, it’s even the universal tongue. (214 mots)
alan.ld Posté(e) le 3 janvier 2015 Auteur Signaler Posté(e) le 3 janvier 2015 Bonjour JRB ! Merci beaucoup pour votre correction constructive ! Je vais la garder précieusement parce que je trouve que c'est un bon résumé de mes erreurs ! Étourderies (la relecture...), erreurs basiques (oui Sherlock ! ), temps, et petits mots (at, for, in, on...)...
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