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[alexandrafoot38]

Coucou !

Pouvez-vous me dire si mon oral est correct ? C'est sur la notion lieux et formes de pouvoir et pourriez-vous m'aider pour les fautes ? Merci !!

The notion Im going to deal with is the notion of places and forms of power. In the past, communicating, exchanging information with people abroad or being updated about the evolution of our world was quite complicated because of the distance. But today, our world has never seemed smaller, as transportation and telecommunication have accelerated the rhythm of exchanges between different areas and reduced the scale of our planet.

Im going to illustrate this notion through the example of online social networks to see how social networks give more power.

In politics and in the life, the power permit to do respect and to influence peoples behavior. Thanks to the power, we can put in place laws, rules and prevent conflicts and tensions for a better life for everybody. But the power may be a form of dictatorship, like the bulling in social networks. So we can see 2 examples which show positive and negative point of new power in social networks.

For the positive point, I can say Facebook help the police because the social network allowed to identify some criminals, and its permit to win time at the police to find evidences and information like the address, friends, criminals pictures. To take a precisely example: Jenifer Wilson is a young woman, who was the victim of an aggression in the nightclub. To find his aggressor she played the detective and she recover him on Facebook. Thanks to pictures, the young wooman was able to identify this criminal, a thing which hadnt been done by the police because pictures in the security camera werent clear. Jenifer Wilson gave the aggressors address at the police and they stopped him. The story is the evidence that social networks can help to do the justice.

For the negative point, information and messages put on Facebook werent protected and so, someone who knows the computer can read these informations. And some boss watches the Facebook profile of employees, and sometimes they are fired because of pictures or messages. To take an example, in the States, an employee wrote on Facebook I hate my boss, and someone else gone to say at the boss with evidence, so the guy was fired.

We can see that the power in social network is very important because of big number of person on. Social network permit at communicate very fast without move, at can speak at much persons, at can follow a number of anybody. But social networks have dangerous powers because the private life isnt respect. There is too the cyber bullying at the teen which become more and more important because persons feel protect behind computer.

But social networks present too positive aspect, the generosity and associations become more and more present thanks to the big number people, like the ice bucket challenge.

Apres je sais plus trop quoi dire... si vous avez des petites idees je prends ^^

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

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For the negative point, information and messages put on Facebook werent< Pourquoi ce passé tout à coup ? aren't protected and so, someone who knows the computer computing can read these this informations. And Some bosses watches the Facebook profile of their employees and sometimes they are fired fire them because of pictures or messages. <Il faut être cohérent dans l'emploi des pronoms, faute de quoi on ne sait pas qui fait quoi. To Let's take another example: in the States, an employee wrote on Facebook "I hate my boss" and someone else gone to say at told the boss with evidence, so the guy was fired.

We can see that the power in social networks is very important because of a big number of person on connected people. Social networks permit at enable people to communicate very fast without moving from / without leaving/ < v-ing après une préposition their homes, at can speak at much persons, at can follow a number of anybody. <Désolé, je ne parviens pas à comprendre ce que ça peut bien vouloir dire. But social networks have dangerous powers because the private life isn't respected. There is too also the cyber bullying at the of teens which is becoming more and more important because persons bully boys feel protected behind their computer screens.

But social networks also present too positive aspects, the generosity and associations become more and more present thanks to the big number of people participants like the ice bucket challenge.

Apres je sais plus trop quoi dire... si vous avez des petites idees je prends ^^

Bonne chance pour ton oral que, soit dit entre nous, j'espère meilleur que ton écrit.

[alexandrafoot38]

ah cool merci ! pour le dico je vais sur wordreference