Expression Écrite

[tompouce]

Nouveau sujet + correction de la mise en page, de la ponctuation et de l'orthographe !

Sans vouloir t'offenser, tu traînes des lacunes grammaticales indignes d'un niveau de première. Tu as intérêt à mettre les bouchées doubles voire triples pour les combler sans plus tarder.

JRB

Bonjour moi aussi j'ai un petit soucis au niveau d'une expression écrite... Pourriez-vous donnezr votre avis sur mon expression écrite svp SVP ?

And then , the old woman knocked Billy with the piece of wood hid under her dress , Billy was on the ground, unconscious and injured.

Despite his old woman physique, she carried Billy on her back, the smile in the face. She walked up the stairs and she arrived in the 3d floor. She opened the door and she put down Billy in the ground, Gregory and Christopher were here, they were scared and sad.

The landlady had kidnapped the two man for many years and she was shuted them in the room. The room was dark, dirty and obsucurious.

She fastened Billy with a chain and said " See you my dear" She came out to the room.

Billy became again consciensous at 8 o'clock in the morning. He looked Gregory and Christophe, they was dirty and weakened.

Christhopher doesn't said anithing, he looked him without move. Billy was perplexed. So he said "Where are you miss, it's very strange!" "you have been kidnapped by the landlady, this woman is very crazy, I'm here since 2 years and Christopher 3 years " explained Gregory. "It's unbelieviable, I don't want stay here, I would like to be a bussinessman, I want a beautiful life!" said Billy with sob.

[Ezehkiel Jones]

Hello' !

Je pense, tompouce, qu'ouvrir un nouveau sujet serait plus judicieux, si tu souhaites que quelqu'un t'aide.

Et puis éclairci un peu ton problème et soigne tes paragraphes même s'ils sont pleins de fautes. Tout ces blancs rendent la lecture relativement désagréable.

I wish you a huge heap of patience if you ever undertake to correct the above tedious nonsense.

JRB