Correction D'un Travail

[Marie861]

Bonjour,

Pouvez-vous m'aider à corriger un texte d'anglais ? S'il vous plait.

Je tiens à dire que j'ai beaucoup de mal en conjugaison anglaise.

Voici la première partie du texte :

(J'ai une introduction, mais elle était donnée, donc je ne la poste pas)

"Well, my first text will be " A boy's journey" wrote by Seymour Reichtzeit, and the other text will be "Dear Mom and Dad" wrote by Heibinh Nguyen. And my only picture is "The statue of Liberty" and her poem "The New Colossus "

Many migrants chose to go in America. Through the two texts, we will talk about change of space, from Poland to America, and Vietnam to America. It's the Statue of Liberty who marks the entry to the American space with her poem The New Colossus which says "I lift my lamp beside the golden door". The statue is one of the symbols of the United States, it's a symbol of freedom and liberty. This is why all immigrants arriving in America wanted to see this monument. Even today tourists who go to America want to see the Statue of Liberty because she also reminds them exchanges between countries. Besides, it's obvious that today's world is still a world of exchanges with a discussed topic: the globalization.

Indeed, before the globalization there were many exchanges between countries, from a space to another. In the text "A boy's journey" we can see exchanges between America and its migrants from Poland. Immigrants have come with their languages, cultures, customs and ways of living. Here it's the story of a young Polish boy who have come in America where he started a new life; he became a famous singer, and he even sang for the President, who helped him bringing his family in America. This story shows us amazing human exchanges because the President, who is a famous and known person, help an immigrant who is not even an American. "

Voilà pour la première partie. Merci

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

"Well, the first text will be I'm going to comment on is " A boy's journey" wrote written by Seymour Reichtzeit, and the other text will be is "Dear Mom and Dad" wrote by Heibinh Nguyen. <Révise à fond les verbes irréguliers que tu DOIS connaître par cœur, c'est essentiel. And my only picture is "The statue of Liberty" and her the poem "The New Colossus " <Le poème ne lui appartient pas !

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Indeed, before the globalization there were many exchanges between countries, from a space to another. In the text "A boy's journey" we can see exchanges between America and its migrants from Poland. Immigrants have come with their languages, cultures, customs and ways of living. Here it's the story of a young Polish boy who have come came in to America where he started a new life; he became a famous singer, and he even sang for the President who helped him bringing to bring his family in to America. This story shows us amazing human exchanges because the President, who is a famous and known person, helped an immigrant who is was not even an American. " <Attention à la cohérence des temps : tant que tu es dans le récit, tu dois conserver le prétérit.

NB : balise une erreur déjà commise que je te laisse le soin de corriger toi-même.

Finalement, ce n'est pas si mal que tu le laissais entendre.

[Marie861]

Bonjour,

Merci pour votre réponse .

Alors :

Well the first text will be (etc.) c'était donné en modèle, mais votre formule me parait plutôt sympathique ! Alors je vais la reprendre pour tous les autres textes.

Donc voici les petites choses à re-coriger.

"Well, the first text I'm going to comment on is " A boy's journey" written by Seymour Reichtzeit, and the other text is "Dear Mom and Dad" written by Heibinh Nguyen. And my only picture is "The statue of Liberty" and the poem "The New Colossus "

Many migrants chose to go to America. Through the two texts, we are going to talk about moving from Poland to America, and Vietnam to America. It's the Statue of Liberty who marks the entry to the American space with the poem The New Colossus which says "I lift my lamp beside the golden door". The statue is one of the symbols of the United States, it's a symbol of freedom and liberty. This is why all immigrants arriving in America wanted to see this monument. Even today tourists who go to America want to see the Statue of Liberty because she also reminds them exchanges between countries. Besides, it's obvious that today's world is still a world of exchanges with a discussed topic: globalization.

Indeed, before globalization there were many exchanges between countries, from a space to another. In the text "A boy's journey" we can see exchanges between America and its migrants from Poland. Immigrants have come with their languages, cultures, customs and ways of living. Here it's the story of a young Polish boy who came to America where he started a new life; he became a famous singer, and he even sang for the President who helped him to bring his family to America. This story shows us amazing human exchanges because the President, who is a famous and known person, helped an immigrant who was not even an American. "

Encore merci, je vais essayer de corriger le reste toute seule.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

Merci pour votre réponse . C'est avec plaisir.

Alors :

Well the first text will be (etc.) c'était donné en modèle, mais votre formule me parait plutôt sympathique ! Alors je vais la reprendre pour tous les autres textes. Désolé pour toi si le futur avec will + V était donné en modèle car il est erroné. Quant à trouver ma formulation " sympathique ", c'est gentil de ta part mais elle est avant tout grammaticalement correcte.

Donc voici les petites choses à re-corriger.

"Well, the first text I'm going to comment on is " A boy's journey" written by Seymour Reichtzeit and the other text is "Dear Mom and Dad" written by Heibinh Nguyen. And my only picture is "The statue of Liberty" and the poem "The New Colossus "

Many migrants chose to go to America. Through the two texts, we are going to talk about moving from Poland to America, and Vietnam to America. It's the Statue of Liberty who marks the entry to the American space with the poem The New Colossus which says "I lift my lamp beside the golden door". The statue is one of the symbols of the United States, it's a symbol of freedom and liberty. This is why all immigrants arriving in America wanted to see this monument. Even today tourists who go to America want to see the Statue of Liberty because she also reminds them exchanges between countries. Besides, it's obvious that today's world is still a world of exchanges with a discussed topic: globalization.

Indeed, before globalization there were many exchanges between countries, from a space to another. In the text "A boy's journey" we can see exchanges between America and its migrants from Poland. Immigrants have come with their languages, cultures, customs and ways of living. Here it's the story of a young Polish boy who came to America where he started a new life; he became a famous singer, and he even sang for the President who helped him to bring his family to America. This story shows us amazing human exchanges because the President, who is a famous and known person, helped an immigrant who was not even an American. " Bravo, c'est impeccable.

Encore merci, je vais essayer de corriger le reste toute seule.

Bonne initiative mais n'hésite pas à revenir questionner si tu as des doutes.