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[FrenchyGirly]

Bonjour à toutes et à tous

Je dois écrire une rédaction de type "essay" pour mon devoir d'anglais. Le sujet est "Pourquoi choisit-on d'étudier à l'Université?". J'ai gribouillé quelques petites choses, je me suis re-lu plusieurs fois mais je crains qu'il y ait encore quelques erreurs. Je serais très reconnaissante si une âme charitable voudrais me corriger....

Merci d'avance

Bonne fin de journée

According to « Sabah Gazetesi », the number of students in world attending a University has increased of 15% during the five last years. The datas shows perfectly that nowadays more and more students go to University. It can be very interesting to analyze why people go more and more to University. For me there are three reasons : garanteeing a job, pressure put by families and more rare, the passion of learning.

First of all, I think people go to University in other to guarantee a job . Indeed they often think about the job and the high wage they can earn in order to have a comfortable lifestyle and to provide themselves. They don't study for pleasure but only for making money in the future. They want to reach a high social statut, to have lots of money and they want to say « Look, I am rich ».

An other reason explainning why people attend University is the pressure put by their families. In my opinion, lots of people don't chose to go to University. I know lots of people who wanted to do something different after hight school such as travelling, working or they have others plans in their mind. Unfortunatelly, we live in a society where everybody don't do what they want, but what other people say them to do. Student's parents are bothered about what friends and relatives would think if their children don't attent University. They only want what’s best for their children but what they think is best is not always the case.

« I'm a man of leisure. That's because I have an English degree and I can't get a job » sais Jarol Kintz, a famous American author. Like him, there are some people attending University for learning. These people doesn't study for money and doesn't care about a high social statut, they have just one purpose in life : learning and dying less stupid. I have a great admiration for these people because they don't study for obligation ; but because they want it ; Like Shelly Foote said, for them University is a « group of building gathered around a library ».

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[Jean B]

Bonjour,

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« I'm a man of leisure. That's because I have an English degree and I can't get a job » says Jarol Kintz, a famous American author. Like him, there are some people attending University for learning. These people doesn't study for money and doesn't care about a high social statute, they have just one purpose in life : learning and dying less stupid.<Relis-toi toujours : people = pluriel ! I have a great admiration for these people because they don't study for are under no obligation /are not obliged/ to study, but because they want it to; Like Shelly Foote said, for them University is a « group of buildings gathered around a library ».

Prends l'habitude de toujours te relire comme si le texte t'était complètement étranger, de manière à éliminer tes erreurs sans aide extérieure.

Un jour d'examen ou de concours, personne ne le fera à ta place.

Bonne continuation.