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[coco88]

Bonjour pouvez vous me corriger mes fautes svp . merci d avance

I watched your report about child labour in kalanga. This report is very moving because we see children worked hard in the mines. What schocked me the most it s the young age of children. The report is very interesting because he shows US the inequality ans poverty in the world.

The report shows US the true reality : children work hard to eat and drink. In your report, children work in toxic water : it is very dangerous to their health. However, when the children speak in the report this really touched me because the young children would go to school but his father dont have money to pay School ; he ils obliged tout work in the mine. Moreover children are very tired. We have the chance to go to school for free, ans having to eat and drink.

[Jean B]

Bonjour,

I watched your report about child labour in Kalanga. This report is very moving because we can see children worked working hard in the mines. What schocked me the most it s is the young age of children. <Pas de double sujet en anglais. The report is very interesting because he it shows US us the inequality and poverty in the world. - Il y a 3 pronoms sujet à la 3ème personne du singulier, he/she/it. Révise ta grammaire et relis-toi pour éviter ce genre de sottise.

- US = United States <---> us = nous, pronom complément.

The report shows US the true reality : children work hard to eat and drink. In your report, children work in toxic water : it is very dangerous to their health. However, when the children speak in the report this really touched me because the young children would like to go to school but his father dont doesn't have money to pay for school - child, singulier vs children, pluriel. Tu devrais tout de même savoir accorder le sujet en nombre avec son verbe.

- to like to do sth = aimer faire qqch

- do/does/did, ça ne te rappelle rien ? ; he ils obliged tout work in the mine. Moreover children are very tired. We have the chance are lucky/fortunate to go to school for free, ans having have to eat food and drink.

Mets-toi au travail avant qu'il ne soit trop tard.